When I was only six years old
In kindergarten I knew so little,
Was so ignorant as to be so bold
As to think I knew every riddle!
We live in a very thin time line
Of individual experience that is
Limited within the lifetime
Of each human Mr. and Ms.
As we grow we come to know
How little we don't know, too.
We don't know more than we know we know,
And we don't know for sure if that's true.
The worst you can do is think things just you
Know that nobody else ever does.
If you do I tell you your friends will be few,
When you know things that never was!
If space and time and all this rhyme
Have you somewhat confused,
Just relax your backs, lay back sublime.
It's best to just be amused.
You don't know more than you really know
However much you think you do.
So just carry on, put on a good show,
Though inside you know this ain't you!
Ellis
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Written January 7th, 2006
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wow..my dear god of rhyme,when did you write this one that I didn't see that?
This is a wonderful piece.There are so much we know and much more that we don't know.
Shahrzad
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A bit of satire on the common assumption we've all made, one time or another, that we know it all. Nice work
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this was so cute!!!!
When I was only six years old
In kindergarten I knew so little,
Was so ignorant as to be so bold
As to think I knew every riddle!
my riddle then was solved--chicken pox and six weeks out of school came from kiss chase---i should have learnt then, do not chase the boys!!!! only took me 35 years more to learn that one. hhhmmmmmm?????
you did a great job on this one. thank you for sharing your talent with me tonight. viyanna r langager -
this is a fun read...kind of tongue twisting in a way yet the message comes through loud and clear definitely a clever poem. very nicely done
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ok dat was a great piece of art speaking about the various satges of life we cross and it has perfect continuty as well as rhythm ! an appreciable work
keep writing
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Hehehe, I loved being so little I thought I knew everything. Oh wait, I still do! Lol...jk.
Wonderful poem! There are a few grammar errors, like using "was" with a plural noun in lines 15-16. Somewhere between the beginning and the end the rhythem changed as well...
But otherwise, fantastic job! Love the message and the poem itself. ^_^ -
Well, you know that I know that you know what you know, and if I knew what you know, then we would both know. LOL!!! This was very lighthearted and amusing. I really, REALLY enjoyed this one. BRAVO!!!! Great sense of humor, great flow to this poem. Good rhyming quality. It's a thinker...Love it!!! Susan
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EXCELLENT!
omg....I think this is the best poem i have read yet!...you have excellent talent. Please...keep writing poems like this. You will get very far. -
I really like this poem a lot... it is amusing and fun to read but it really does have a deep meaning to it to... well done.
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excellent
Cool poem, very creative. I like the referral to kindergarten. Good years, when you didn't have the pressures of being a teenager pressed upon you. People think that being a teen is easy, but it isn't. Sorry for raving. Excellent piece, keep it up. -
This is one that makes you think while you read, cause if you don't, you will become confused. I like that, as it makes the poem stand out more. Athena
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Good
Very much true. Just you wait until they start changing the answers on ya. -
Very nice write and cleverly written. To some, it may seem difficult to understand, but it is quite understandable and true. Excellent write.
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good work at describing the arrogance of some countries and the others are the narrators saying what the truth is...food for thought..marks of good poetry.
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Good wording, and brings alot of joy as if a
"We live in a very thin time line ...." These are neat descriptions& words of speaking your thoughts and you heart.
I can feel such a childlike nature about your writing
and I think that is neat.
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Well it is really a very poetic way to describe the mode of the life in terms its defination and to some extent to its philosophy too, to understand the meaning of the self.The thoughts are very creatively expressed like a journey of the meaning just in creascendo manners as well.The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too I really appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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Good Job
well said.I remember when i was just learning Mr and mrs and ms.LOL Wow.But yeah i get the poem.We've learned to admit it is ok too not know everything! *o) -
Excellent
very true when we are young we know all when we are old we know little Excellent
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