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What is This?

this poem is unfinished but i felt i should allow others to see it...maybe my muse can come back later and help me finish it...


What is this,
This pain...it's back
Only this time its different
This time it's a lack of communication...
I want to talk...
I can't though
I can't place the words I so deeply wish to say...
I want to tell you every emotion I feel when I look at you
But some don't even have names
I want to tell you my every thought with my every breath...
And when you touch me...electric sparks
I can't let go of you...
I love you so much that it tears at my heart...my soul
Even as I write this my body shakes...your electricity permeates my skin as I think of you...
And when we kiss...unspeakable...
I love you completely...heart, body, and soul...
I love you so much that it hurts me...
Sometimes I imagine us dancing together...you in the dress that you know I love on you...me looking my best...
We dance in a place neither has seen yet  very familiar to the both of us...
Out of instinct I offer you a dance…you accept and we step onto the floor...
although no music is audible, we dance in time to the beats of eachother's hearts...¦keeping pace with the music within our souls...

Author notes

Sorry about that...didn't know all those symbols had gotten in there instead of ellipses and apostrophes...
Feel free to give me some critical comments...my art thrives on criticism...
Written January 1st, 2006

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  • cante jondo
    January 7, 2006
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    sorry about that there was an error onthe page...feel free tko come back and read the poem as it was meant to be read...

  • jeff17songwriter
    January 7, 2006
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    what is this it does not make scence