Lies are usually rounded and smooth
while truths are rough and homely and often jagged.
Perhaps that’s why lies slide so easily from our lips
while the truth gets trapped behind our tied and tired tongues –
all its untidy syllables swallowed silently and eulogized with a sigh.
You taught me that a lie doesn’t even have to find voice -
it can be just the silence where truth should be making noise.
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Written January 6th, 2006
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Thank you, MG. Praise from you always swells my head.
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Thank you so much for the kind words, Tim. I have got to get used to the new name.....the old one springs automatically to mind, donchano.
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sharp biting incredible writing
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Standing ovation
This truth you've bestowed upon us is neither rough, nor homely. Your style is a brilliant mix of assonance and alliteration, of simple and profound, as usual. I love the imagery you've used and the way your words roll off the tongue more smoothly than the lies you speak of. Beautifully done! -
It's true, lies can soothe with fatuous platitudes and pretty appearances, while truth does not budge. Lies can also multiply in the absence of compassion, particularly the slanders that people love to share.
I like your prose poem, it has great alliteration and images, for example "lies slide so easily", like a snake.
Well done!
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It is written that a person who can control his tongue is greater than the person that controls a city. Telling the truth beautifully, without injury, takes great skill and even more patience than listening to the woes of chronic complainers that find fault in every syllable. The problem rests in the receiver perceiving injury, as well...if I am not offended, I find no reason to forgive and the truth (as well as lies) never become my enemy. However, barbed or smooth, the truth shall set one free. Thanks for the meditation. It's nice when someone writes about the more important topics in life, such as you did here. Peace Through Love. ET Timothy
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Oh and this is all TOO true! Such a talented write with just a few lines. Very well spoken and clear meaning.
Blessings and *stomps -
Awful deceptions carry a cup of hemlock and painful lessons...the truth always surfaces.
I appreciate your insight and heart, as always. Hope your new year carries every new beginning to a fruitful ending.
karen
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Excellent
A excellent piece of truth uttered loudly.
A descerning piece of artistry eloquently spoken.
A enlightning poem which speaks volumes.
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this poem was short and sweet yet it seemed like a story a very beasutiful poem indeed. I love the words you used in your poem like jagged very diffetent. you are a very talented writer. I cannot wait to read another by you you should enter this into a contest. keep writing
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Oh wow. This was extremely powerful, I loved it. It was short, but to the point, and it made it even greater. Thank you for sharing this poem, I will always think of the comparison between the truth and lies in the first two lines when the subject happens to cross my mind. It was such an awesome way of making it all concrete. I especially loved the last two lines. A strong start, and you go out with a bang, I liked it.
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not trying to be a dick, i liked the piece, and i liked some of the imagery and what not (you get the thumb up) but as far as poetry... in the sense of structure and form... hmm i was gonna say it sucked but i may be just oppinionated.. you might consider spending a bit of time and polishing? lose some of the unnecesary words, maybe break the sentances up a bit so that some of it doesn't seem so forced, or maybe awkward is more what i'm trying to say.
ie: (and by the way i would say these two lines were my favorite)
you did:
You taught me that a lie doesn’t even have to find voice -
it can be just the silence where truth should be making noise.
I might have done something morealong the lines of
You taught me lies
need not, find voice
when silence holds, truth
must shout
mind you this is just an idea.
hope this finds you well and maybe helps.
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great
I couldn't agree with you more. thought provoking piece of writing. I liked the picture you added for effect. the last 2 lines were my favorite. thanks for sharing. best of wishes to you in the new year! peace. -
Great job. I really ;liked it. sometimes short poems do the best job of speaking to our hearts. It really made me think. The main idea was great, and very true. Great job.
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and how i have missed your works.there are times when my mind craves for the essence of your brand of concise profundity and that is no lie."where truth should be making a noise ,"is such a powerful statement which ring so very true.a lie slithers silently among us and reeks havoc without making a sound.i believe that the truth should be loud as to be heard.you are back with wisdom that comes when a person of your debt has something to say.i would love to hear you speak some of tha fantastic words you write.i know ot would be a verbal symphony.welcome back my dear,for the absence of your talent does a misjustice to this site.
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gr8 poem! gd representation, short but gd! enjoyed reading this.. well done.. keep it up! x x x
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nice piece...good, vivd imagery and for sure a good subject. "all its untidy syllables swallowed silently and eulogized with a sigh." is my favorite line in this piece. well done! i'll have to read more of your work
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I love it!
Amazing poem- I love the mataphors! Such an amazing illustration of truth and lies- I love it!
-me-
ps YOU ROCK
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