Tears,
false joy,
lies like sand,
broken families,
new dead soldiers,
kids as broken toys.
Desperate women,
kid without a father.
Mother is putting just
a new brick in the wall.
Contemporary society
with a special shape industry
are producing only
a new brick in the wall.
He is building a wall
around his heart,
he is building a wall
around his feelings,
he is building a wall
to be torn apart.
Don't look for the reality
everything could be only his fantasy,
each woman is a threat for him,
only
a new brick in the wall.
He may try to scratch it
with his bloody nails.
He may try to jump over
screaming.
Bad dream.
Fears...
Anybody there to hear me?
Fears...
Anybody there to see me?
Fears...
Anybody there to feel me?
He don't want to be
a new brick in the wall.
Inside he is built of pain
inside he is hiding his name.
You can see dead flesh,
you can try to heal his soul.
New brick in the wall...
Do not look for the reality
everything could be a fantasy,
New kids, new game,
toys, water, soil.
New brick in the wall.
~~ooOoo~~
Author notes
I was inspired by the Pink Floyd's album THE WALL, as well with the movie. They have three poem with the same title Another brick in the wall.
The most powerful music I have ever heard.
This poem won a gold trophy
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Written January 6th, 2006
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Pretty damn amazing. I'm speechless.
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great job! The Fears... part reminded me how Hey You isnt in the movie, which saddened me because its my favorite song off the album.
He don't want to be
new brick in the wall.
doesnt go gramaticly well for me, the New brick in the wall part, normally id put an a, but since you are repeatng it works fine. But id change don't with dosen't myself, makes it sound better.
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This Is great!!
A Floyd fan I am and will eternily stand against the replicated beating found naught of the god's hand. -
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Floyds are the part of my youth and I still love them the same way. Thank you Frankenchrist for your kind comment.
~Sonja~
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Thank you Liam.
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Good flow and choice of words. Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck
Liam
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AWESOME!
Your words are so compelling and beautifully written. -
Thank you for your, for me, very precious comment. All my verses came out from my heart, all other depands of my readers. You are one of those who understand. Thank you.
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excellent
Deep and profound poem. I believe you wrote with honest feelings of truth. No one ever wants to become"The New Brick in the Wall".Only we can change our situations,the "Wall" certainly cannot. Nice flow of very expressive words and a theme that is worth a thought.I hope your poem makes other people think. Thank you for writing and sharing. -
Thank you Marmelade.
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Congratulations on the Trophy! Im a huge Floyd fan and this poem is great!
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Sonja, you really did an amazing job on this one. first of all I totally agree with you on The Wall, it's an amazing album, and the film is really... creepy in a way. But for some ppl it can really be like building a safety-wall around the heart, especially in war.
You know, the references to the kids in your poem were really painful, but they also are the ones that have to take things up after the destructions and move on. I loved that in your ending. It keeps hope alive. Also how 'the woman' comes along: as a treath to hide away from, or every new one of them another brick to keep yourself safe from the world.
I have one tip about the grammar: the sentence "He's building wall" wouLd sound a lot better if you'd say "a wall".
Well besides of that: this was really touching. Thanks for sharing this painful beauty.
Ostara
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