Poor flower blossom child always all alone
Mother doesn't want her and daddy doesn't care
All she had was a name, then was kidnapped from home
Her kidnapper became a lover that could make her moan
They should have married and gave all they had to share
Poor flower blossom child always all alone
There were other kidnappings, but none would condone
Thumbelina had to fend for herself, completely bare
All she had was a name, then was kidnapped from home
So out the girl walked in the cold, a depressing tone
right to a house a field mouse used as a lair
Poor flower blossom child always all alone
Another sought her hand in marriage like so long ago,
but Mole was killed when the mouse's bloodlust had to flare
All she had was a name, then was kidnapped from home
This time a Fairy King rescued her from the unknown,
but all he did was rape the girl and tear out her hair
Poor flower blossom child always all alone
All she had was a name, then was kidnapped from home
Author notes
Ahahaha...um...I tried?
Villanelle - AbA2 abA abA2 abA abA2 abAA2 rhyme.
I at least hope it was decent. 
Written January 6th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Tinted Fairy Tales by Victoria of Aragon.
350 points, ended January 25, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you for your kind words.
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Great poem I love the twist to it. Kinda sad but very interestng. I love the form you used also. Good work I will have to read moe of your work soon.
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I'm glad you liked it, darling. I'm rather proud of this myself. I loved how it turned out. 
Best of luck to you with judging.
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OH! OH! OH!!!! .. ~Took in a deep breath.~ I'm ever so glad you entered.
Even if you L I E D and said you wouldn't!
Anyway.. This is a lovely spin on the story of Thumbelina, darling. Very interesting and dark side of it all. AND, you used a Villanelleeee.. Which I find utterly breathtaking, and you were able to pull it off AGAIN. So, yay, you! xP
And, and, and.. Mm'hmm. Thank you for taking the time to enter, and all that other jazz. Best of luck to you. -
Ha...the first line of the second stanza is my favorite. I've enver heard of the movie you speak of. *shrug* Oh well. Thanks for the comment.
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I may have to enter this contest if I find myself with time, which is somewhat unlikely. But I love the idea of it. And I love the spin you put on this poem. I've always had a love of the darker side of fairy tails. There's this movie out that's like a gothed up dark version of Snow White and I was raving about it for weeks. Mmhmm. I love the melancholy feel to this and...yes. I just love it. Great job. *blinks as box grows*
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I was kinda tired when I wrote this. *shrug* I didn't think I'd be able to pull this off, actually. Thank you for your comment.
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I wish that I wrote this good when I was tired!! lol. I really liked this piece. I felt like I connected with it, always felt alone and searching for love. Keep up the good work!!
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Heh...I see what you mean. I didn't think I'd be able to enter, but I apparantly did.
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Aww! Sad story! Good luck in the contest. It kind of reminds me of Melan with the last stanza. A lovelt villanelle.
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