I heard desire echoed in the night
A haunting melody that moved the stars
She sang of dreams and wavered in her flight
and from her warbled words I knew her scars.
I bade her near; she would not head my call
Said she preferred the comfort of the dark.
To many times she’d felt love’s sworn enthrall
Only to find his oath had been a lark.
I longed to give her comfort from her pain
but never saw her face, just heard her trill.
She hid from me all but her sweet refrain
which told me that her name was whippoorwill .
Oh thou glorious bird in yonder tree
please say you’ll stay and sing your song for me.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 6, 2006
Author notes
Funny how you sometimes find poems when you aren't looking for them. I actually set out to write a comedy, when I wrote this. The first lines I wrote read:
Oh pretty, pretty birdie in a tree
won’t you please stay and sing a song for me?
It was going to be funny… I swear it was. But it flew right out the window when I started to write it and this one flew in. Oh well, I think this is a better poem anyway. I hope you like it. Patti
Written January 6th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Can YOU write a Sonnet? by Joshua-Luke.
300 points, ended January 22, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Delightful
Delightful poem, AngelSeeker.
Love your writing; this is a keeper!
I have you down as a favorite,
Never let me down a bit!
Ellis -
Beautiful, looks like you have one judge swept. Hope you sweep the others as well. This poem is utterly amazing. A comedy, well, you sure did come out with something different, and it's great. Good luck in the contest!!
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That needed an applaud, for sure.
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The photo is breathtaking, as is your poem - amazing how a comedy start can change into this lovely sonnet. Well written.
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This is good. I love to hear the whipperwill. In the south we hear them every night in summer.
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Beautiful Metamorphosis from comedy to beauty. It shows it came from within, and it was a terrific write. I too, have had that happen so I totally understand, just your muse was going in a different direction, that's all.
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amazing trully amazing i loooove this piece
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Beautiful! Just beautiful! Great imagery. Your personifications and metaphors are unique and very creative. An interesting and well written piece. I enjoyed it very much! Thank you.
Sheryl -
lovely
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Thank you for that flattering comment. I always enter any poem I write for a contest even if I don't think I have chance to win. Sometimes I'm pleasantly surprised. After all it’s hard to judge your own work. It’s also hard to judge someone else’s taste, art is so very subjective. I hope you enter and I look forward to reading your work. Patti
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Thank you for your reply. I'm glad that you enjoyed my work. The picture is one I morphed. I took a picture of a sunset and edited it in several diffrent programs. I believe the final effect I used on this one was in my greeting card program, it makes a picture look like it was done as a chalk drawing. It also changes the colors. I don't use it often, because most of the time I don't like the way it changes the colors, but with this picture I did. I just came back from a trip to Florida and I can't wait to play with some of those photos. Especially my sunrise on the beach ones. I'm just sorry that I forgot my camera and had to go back to my hotel room for it just as the show was getting really good, and that I left my extra memory for my digital camera at my friends house on Christmas morning so I can't just plug the pictures in and start working. Patti
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beautiful
This is a stunning piece....Ive just written one but I dare not enter after reading this,,,truely its beautiful Well done and good luck -
The picture and poem was beautiful and usually, at least for me, when the writing takes over and out comes words you didn't plan on, that is usually when we see our best work.
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Wherever did you find that picture? It's so beautifull...just like your poem. Yeah, i agree, writing sometimes can be led off in the strangest directions, but at least your was a good direction that it was led off in... did that make sense? Oh well.
love, light and peace
-Spike -
judges, i think we have a winner. only time will tell. Good write, your unique use of words is truly amazing. your vocabulary is strong. I hope the other contestants will do so well.
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I find a well chosen title can really make a peice what it is.
This title was so perfect, this peice went from good to great.
I loved this sweet little story.
Beautiful phrasing.
Really a great job.
Congrats and good luck in your contest.
peace *&* love always,
~~~purezen.
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