Life is wasted on the living
fucking wasting being alive
always taking more than giving
making things come to us
never taking a dive.
God strike us down for what were take for granted
we give out our shit but cant take being bantered
Always saying were hurt, just to guilt another
treating everyone like dirt, blaming them as a cover.
Life is wasted on the living give the dead another chance
they would live life better now, not just take it at a glance
Appreciate the loving not give up at sight of pain
all we live for is to die... doesn't matter what we gain
Life after death..guess what..I cant wait
all these people just living on whatever they can take
Feel like I'm being followed, feel eyes upon my being
I'm searching round me madly..but there's nothing that I'm seeing
An empty stretch of road, a new world to explore
the trees stand there so silently not callin me a Whore...
a Bitch, a Hag, a piece of Shit..
not tearing me down bit by bit
Life wasted on the living, us breathing poisoned air
four words for us to live by...FUCKING LEARN TO CARE
Author notes
i was quite angry and i went for a walk and ended up typing this in my phone...
Written January 5th, 2006
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YEAH!!!! I love the message!!! I also don't mind the swearing as it helps to get the point across somehow. There are a few parts which I think could be improved just for the purpose of making it a bit easier to read. For example:
Life is wasted on the living
Give the dead another chance
They would live our life right now
Far better than we do
Appreciate the loving
Those who take it through the pain
We are all here just to die
etc, etc, etc...
Now, I do not claim to be a fantastic poet myself, so don't necessarily listen to me!!! It is just my opinion. The message is just great and that is probably why I went on a roll on this now!
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Powerful...and ohhhhh so true! Great write! I wasn't too sure if this was a piece I was going to enjoy at first, but I am definitely gald that I kept reading because I found that I really did get satisfaction from reading it. Good Job!
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nice ali... really deep an meaningful. hope ur not taking stuff too nadly an u kno u can talk to me if u want. but the poem is good, nice rythm, easy flow... i'm here...
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This one's taking me a while to understand, but then everything is right now. Things with me just got strange not bad, not happy... just strange (ask me later).
My Short reply? Some People just suck.
Keep Smiling
Hostage -
bunnys?...
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the human race can be so fucking disapointing sometimes, just when someone does something good to make you think there's something in there of... i dunno something worth knowing. they just turn and disapoint.
anyhow excellent work i really like the rhyming - unforce and throughout the poem not just end of line stuff. -
fanfukintastik
nicely done its kinda hard 2 know wat all the Bunnys mean but good i feel ya
keep it up
stacey
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