A stroke of the brush
and he is
immortalized
chiseled upon the canvas
He is sleeping as I paint him
curled up on the bed
lips parted
snoring softly
But on my canvas - he burns
His eyes flash with dark mischief
his smile hints at wickedness
Those lips…
Oh God
those lips
They leave me
yearning
as I blend his hunger in
He’s propped on one elbow
hair, finger raked
lids heavy
cheeks shadowed
hand up
finger crooked
beckoning me
I swirl reds
mixing colors, with stiff bristles
lay my brush lightly on the canvas
and smooth
soft sheets across his hips
Generous folds of fabric
hide his desire
heat
burgeoning beneath the textile textures
that lap down
to taste the floor.
Light ripples:
across his sinewy chest
down his startling stomach
dapples in the dimples of his scars
- Maybe I should have left them out -
Pools of shadows on his perfect form
but they tell stories
hint at survival
and strength beyond brute force.
There is beauty even in these flaws.
I caress my pallet
with bold sable tips
lick my wet brush across
the canvas
creating
beige and taupe muscles
elegant legs
surging
from a ghost of shade
I daub a rainbow
splatter the walls
with kaleidoscope splashes
smear them with my hand.
I spread myself
and moonbeams
to shimmer in warm candlelight
Just beyond your view.
His image breathes
in oil
but even so
my Masterpiece
fails to capture his soul.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 4, 2006
Author notes
Written January 5th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Sex Appeal~#8 of 9 by ShadesXofXGray.
300 points, ended January 6, 2006, 2 entries
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loved it, great, good, yay, ok get my point .
excellent, terrific, groovy,keep it up, brilliant, cool,
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Wow the italics work really great withthe picture as it gives this writing a bit more of a classic feel.
I really enjoyed the soft mater to this and look forward to reading more.
Shadows -
A very sensual poem, one that helps us know this man you paint very well - have always thought of opus when I read music - never heard of it in poetic form before. Well written poetry - and what a picture.
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I'll have to think about the moonbeams vs moonlight suggestion. Maybe explore the full meaning of both. Moonbeams seems more sensual to me, and I'm not sure how moonlight is more erotic, but I make it a point to never take a suggestion lightly. Maybe after more thought it will suddenly dawn on me why your suggestion would work better. Thank you for taking the time to make it. I'm glad that you liked this. Patti
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You have a diffrent understanding of what "magnum opus" means then I do.
My Encarta dictionary gives it as:
Magnum opus ~ a great work of art or literature, especially the finest work produced by one individual.
My Thesaurus as:
a great work of art or literature.
My meaning in using it as a title was that my work featuring him was my finest work. However as my poem stated even my best efforts failed to do him justice, so he himself was a "great work of art." Giving the title a double meaning. I will certainly think about changing it, especially if too many people think the title is misleading. Thank you for commenting. I'm glad that you thought so highly of my poem that you took the time to tell my your misgivings about the title. Patti -
Not so silly at all. I often write about Joe when I'm wanting him and he's sleeping or busy. I can't touch him with my hands all the time, but I can draw him with my pen. I wish I could paint, because he belongs on canvas as much as he bleongs in words. Thank you for your comment. Patti
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Wonderful job on this! I love how you put all your passion into an artistic piece.. and a painting as well... I couldnt help but think that you were painting him mischeiviously awake while he was sleeping so that you could keep your hands away from the beautiful body that he has
silly thoughts I know but.. thats the picture that came to me from this!
great job, thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!
Love,
Kid
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This is a very sensual, seductive piece of work. As an artist, I appreciate your combination of visual and lyrical media...Very appropriate. One word though, threw off the erotic flow a bit: moonbeams. Since your work has no apparent rhyme scheme, may I suggest the word 'moonlight' instead? Just a suggestion, please, your work is grand despite the word.
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to me the title is rather cynical... misleading... it could have deeper meaning... the poem it self is wonderful... but you should not have to tell people you are painting a picture... the words should do that in the readers mind... and opus is a joining of different forms... (so i am told and has come to be what i believe... you should have used differnt forms of poetry to create an opus... its all in free verse...) if you are doing a play on words with 'opus' then it (the work) becomes way to comical... the title is misleading...
if i am hard to follow in commenting i am just talking about the title... change it... but don't get me wrong, the poem is awesome... you do paint a picture... thought i feel visuals are not needed in poetry... imagination is what is important... not for you but me as a reader...
Doug
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quite artistic and poetic. It comes with ancient enchantment. Great work of art
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