Colors collide in carnival of dreams
Hazy faces vanish into the mist
God like icons tower with strength
And the dream becomes real
Do I sit and stare into space
Or do I become absorbed in this mystical place
Like the prodigal son returning
Or the person I am leaving?
Clouded figures hold out their arms
As gem-like creations sparkle and fade
Like the eyes of a thousand awakened in their sleep –
Dewy, heavy.
Do I stir and allow myself to waken
Or do I lie motionless and let myself be taken?
Like a possession of theirs
Losing possession of me.
Casting shadows on clouds as on walls
Shapes and patterns pass me by
Colors blend into sheets of light
Bland but warm
Shallow yet hypnotic
Suddenly the icons lose their godliness
And I awake.
The dream is over
Do I begin again?
Author notes
Written November 1st, 1991
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very creative
i like it alot, good luck!
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This poem is really creative and very well crafted. I like the imagery your words convey even better than the feeling it conveys to the reader. Nice work...keep writing.
LIZ -
DUDE this is awesome i love this one
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excellent
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Wow! Just wow! I love this! The thought is just so overwhelming! I love it! I'm out of words I loved it so much! Phenomenal job! Really!
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This is a very powerful pen. The picture you painted with your choice of words were plainly seen throughout the read. I especially like the way you ended it:
Suddenly the icons lose their godliness
And I awake.
The dream is over
Do I begin again?
I cant count how many times I have awaken from a dream and wanted to go back to sleep to finish it. Not nightmares of course. Many times of my mother though, who has been gone for many years..Thanks for the read. I like your style and will be reading more of your creations....
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you've used some beautiful vivid imagery in this poem building up clever layers of pictures- i especially love the lines:
'Like a possession of theirs
Losing possession of me.'
this really evokes a sense of dreaming or being in a dreamlike world/state
great write
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Great write .I enjoyed reading it very much.
Loretta -
I love the flow in this piece. it's so soft and leaves much to the imagination. very well written! I love poems about dreams and this describes what dreaming can feel like at any given night. This part is especially descriptive:
"As gem-like creations sparkle and fade
Like the eyes of a thousand awakened in their sleep –
Dewy, heavy."
Beautiful. I shall read up on more of your works!
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Dreams allow anything and everything to happen, things we don't want to happen either can occur in our dreams. Only trouble is we don't have the ability to ask ourselves these questions during our dreams, just afterwards or before.
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this an reall good poem
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lol, you sort of lost your form towards the end there.
I love the questions in this. No one ever really ponders what to do about dreams, they just ponder the meaning... this is very unique. A lot of interesting images in here, straight from fairytales but not so childish. -
Outstanding writing my friend, this is the type of poetry that dwells in the readers mind long afterward.
Very well done
Roses
Raker -
i really dont understand why so many people keep putting in good stuff like this when i want crap lol i truly appreciate you entering but since this poem is good i think it should be in a different contest so i humbly apologize for this but i'm afraid i'll have to remove it again sorry but it's to good
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Fantastic
I like this poem and I see what you meant when you said I should put more empowerment into my words. I like how your words come alive. I also like the questions this character (you) faces and has to choose from. I really love this poem.
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