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Share all your secrets
Show me who you are
Lower your defenses
Can you go that far?

My heart has been aching
For someone to love
Would you be that someone
That I'm dreaming of?

Can't you just let go,
And let me be the one,
To have, to hold, and cherish,
Until our days are done.

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This piece is one close to my heart...I have a hard time getting my husband to open up to me...It's a work in progress, but hopefully I'll soon get the lines of communication up and running.
Written January 3rd, 2006

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  • Cristea
    April 5, 2006
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    very good

    Nice touch of feelings.
    Sweet and tender love.
    Sweet love is coming softly into
    your poem.Deep feelings and nice thoughts.
    Good job!I liked your poem.Like a flake.
    Nice poem.Keep on writing!


  • EmmaDilemma93
    April 5, 2006
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    wow thats really good lol i know the feeling grrr but it needs works out for me hopefully it does fo ryou though best of luck with that and evenry thing else too good write keep it up


  • Introvert2006
    February 20, 2006
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    Nice poem, thanks for sharing you two!


  • poeticpieces
    February 17, 2006
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    Great!

    This is an amazingn piece, love the emotion within it, great job you two! Keep on penning on!

    lil Tim xo


  • AmberLola
    February 8, 2006
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    Wow just amazing poem keep them coming in great work sweetie

  • Eusebius
    January 9, 2006
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    Bravo!

    Excellent poem! Perfect meter and rhyme, very fine indeed! A double bravo: Bravo! Bravo!

  • Darksea
    January 6, 2006
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    short and sweet, like it... in the first part I like the rythm it flows with! nice written.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 3, 2006
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    Well Done!

    Excellent piece that expresses your heart and soul...I wish you all the best, and thanks for sharing your ink with me...

    Much love, 2006'

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~~~~~~~


  • January 3, 2006
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    Great

    Precious, rare, and beautiful. Way to keep working on your marriage and trying to keep it real. May God bless your marriage!


  • DeathDealerXIII
    January 3, 2006
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    Great

    I can relate to this alot. Because It's kind of how I feel recently. A very well thought out poem.


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 3, 2006
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    Most men hold everything inside, not sharing their feelings with anyone. Wish you luck on this - think you have to initiate some serious chatting for anything to haoppen, they won't do it on their own. So easily read and understood.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    January 3, 2006
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    this is very simply stated and it works well. sometimes it's good to go into great detail and other times few words are needed
    much luck


  • The Vampire Jesse
    January 3, 2006
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    Thats just awwwwh! I love it! I read it twice. I know how you feel with the whole guys opening up beause i had this guy that would not open up completely to me.I loved it, ill have to read it many more times because of its depth. Awesome write, good luck with your husband and keep up the good work!

    The Immortal,
    Jesse.

  • BreakingxThexHabit
    January 3, 2006
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    wow this was great! i loved it! i can relate to this sort of except for the marriage part lol. keep up the great writing!

    Darksoul216


  • Unfortunate Freckle
    January 3, 2006
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    Awww, so sweet! It seems like it should be in one of those ritzy $5.00 hallmark cards. I hope that sounds like a compliment, because it's ment as one. Good write!


  • MidniteRae
    January 3, 2006
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    Aww, this is such a sweet poem. I love it. You said it is a work in progress..I really like it how it is. I can relate to this poem(not about the husband part, but the poem ) awesome write. Keep it up. Good luck with your husband.
    ~Midnite Rae
    [the morbid mistress]
    aka:Marissa Rae

  • Vampiric Fox Demon
    January 3, 2006
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    Ah, this was so wonderful and sweet. I love the emotions and meaning. Beautiful piece. Good luck with your husband and keep on writing.

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