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The broken hearts

Tell me again why things aren't getting any better
Give me a reason as to why the pain wont stop
Bleeding; Dying; Crying
All over you and your stupid casual words
'Soz' is not an apology
Jumping to hasty conclusions
That i was just looking for attention
There's a fine line between absence and cruelty
I have no idea which side you teeter on
But cruelty looks close
Spit out the poison; Wipe away the tears
Lean over the bathroom sink and choke on you
Missed days of bliss; Harsh gestures towards me
Nothing but a toy for you to play with
To push around and rip apart
With sharp, claw like sentences
They'll stitch me back up and give me back to you again
So i can once more get ripped and shredded
Stitch
Rip
Stitch
Tear
Stitch
Maul
Stitch
Shred
Stitch
Die

Left alone and cold
Too numb to
Cry; Feel; Scream; Hurt
Just another soulless body
Floating in a sea of crimson water
Among the rest of the broken hearts

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Written January 3rd, 2006

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  • blinkbelle
    January 15, 2006
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    'There's a fine line between absence and cruelty
    I have no idea which side you teeter on
    But cruelty looks close'
    ace. really really good lauren. well done!
    i miss u!
    lotsa love,
    Bryony
    xxx


  • spot the pink
    January 6, 2006
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    oh yeah i suppose so, but to be honest if you keep using it in such a powerfully fitting way, i dont think anybody's about to start complaining!!!


  • crystaltips
    January 5, 2006
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    Lol thankyou... i need to stop using the toy image... ive used it in so many of my pieces someones bound to realise sooner or later and point it out. lol.

    Thankyou once again for the lovely comment.. i really appreciate it
    Lauren xxx

  • spot the pink
    January 5, 2006
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    super sparkly

    OH MY GOD THIS IS SO FABBY ITS UNREAL!!!!i love it, completely gorgeous, and gorey but wow!!!
    i love how you took the toy image and did so much with it, i never even thought of the whole mending thing when i used it as an image, you did it sooooooooo well!!!
    i really loved the line "lean over the sink and cjoke on you"
    because you do dont you?
    theres so much feeling here...like tiger girl said, you get chills its so charged with energy!!!!
    great write


  • crystaltips
    January 5, 2006
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    thankyou... i appreciate your comment very much thanks again lauren x


  • Tiger Girl
    January 4, 2006
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    amazing

    wow. that's REALLY good. it gave me chills. lol. i like it a lot. good job. much love, tiger

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