God gave us Ten Commandments
or this is what they say…
Did he really think we’d keep them
when we break most every day?
No other Gods, before me
was the way he chose to start
So we go to war in the name of God
and we tear his world apart.
Who are we to judge
that all Gods are not same?
When the God who wrote words
claimed he didn’t have a name.
You shall not -- make graven images
to worship in my place.
So I guess we mustn’t give our God
a body or a face?
But we’re a visual people
and we like to look at things.
So we make idols out of movie stars
and singers into kings
Don’t curse your God is listed.
But there never was a doubt
that when things go wrong in this life
we all shout -- our curses out.
Do you know a single person
who hasn’t broken number three?
Well I haven’t met a damn one
and that’s including me.
Observe the Sabbath day
For it’s only God’s to keep
So we go to church in droves
while our neighbors moan and weep.
Then we puff our chests and brag about
how spiritual we are.
As we step over this world’s bleeding souls
and we ridicule their scars.
Honor your mom and dad.
Why put this one in?
If they’re worthy there’s no need
and if they’re not… then it’s a sin?
I really think that Moses
was having trouble with his son
so he erased God’s 5th commandment
and chiseled in this one.
Next is do not murder
and we swear we’d never kill
but we still -- buy dirty diamonds;
Our cars with foreign gases fill.
We tell ourselves we’re not the ones
killing on those fields.
But if it wasn’t for our cash
there’d be no profit in the yields.
Number seven is adultery
from your vows never depart.
But could God count secret thoughts?
Are you that pure of heart?
Are you sure you’ll always be the one
that your better-half can trust?
Have your mind and body never strayed
in this world that’s fueled by lust?
You shall not steal is number eight
engraved upon the slate
but how many fudge a little
cause on this one we can skate?
We cheat upon our taxes.
Say we can’t afford to give…
But it’s often for the things we want
not the things we need to live.
Oh, how oft we lie to others.
But even worse we lie inside.
We tell ourselves it’s a little thing
and we fib in faulty pride.
We count ourselves a better soul
and we tell ourselves it’s true
- But we’re neither saint nor angel-
so we bare false witness too.
It’s just a loosing battle
when it comes to number ten.
If you lack for food or shelter
or children you can’t win.
There are many things that others have
that we covet every day.
So the truth must be, when we ask of God
that it’s a sin to pray.
God gave us Ten Commandments
All etched upon a rock;
for our sakes I hope they’re not the key
to the “gate of heaven’s” -- lock.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
Author notes
I'm not sure if this is what you would consider to be spiritual or not, but I do. I'm not sure it's the type of poem that will get much applause, but I winning isn't everything. Patti
Written January 2nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- A Unique "Anything Goes" Contest by Sharcu.
300 points, ended January 10, 2006, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh dear, oh dear
Whew, I don't know if I knew
How few I keep just like you;
But with this poem now I chew
On how alone is Heaven's cue? -
I loved this poem it makes you think a lot of what you do and how you're disobeying God's commandments.I think you will definately win this contest.It was so beautifully written and you spoke the truth.Really amazing.Great Job!!!You have my applause.!!!
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This poem captures my exact thoughts, I just never had the skill with words that you show. Very well written.
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I like this. I thought it was well done. Espeically with the title. I saw that title and new I had to check it out. It' well done! You can come by my site anytime you please. Just keep up the great work!
Good luck in the contest!
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That is spiritual, and it is very true. Following the ten commandments is a losing battle.I enjoyed it because i understood your point. awesome flow, normally i dont read long poems but this one didnt read like a long poem normally does. keep up the good work!
The Immortal,
Jesse. -
I wish I was running this contest so I could give you an applaud because this is definately worth every applaud. Wow... Definately what I wasn't expecting, but it left me wondering. I usually don't like reading longer pieces, but this one was definately worth my time. I don't think it would have been quite as good without the rhyming. That definately added to it, although it was forced a bit in some places. As a Christian, I feel like I should point this out to you. The Ten Commandments were written in the Old Testament and are old Testament laws. The Jews had/have a lot of rules and laws for them to get into heaven and be on God's good side. As a Christian, I believe that when Jesus came, he changed all of this. He made it so our key to unlocking heaven's gates was his death upon the Cross. Anyways, very awesome write that made me think a lot.
Good luck in the contest (and I'll try to remember after it's over to come back and applaud this).
--Tim -
sorry forgot to applaud.
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hey like the poem, though kinda lost. I was wondering if you were dising Gods commandments, or mankind. After reading it a second time and thinking i guessed it was mankind. Deep though and makes you wonder. you got my vote.
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You've gone to a bit of trouble writing this - good rhythm and rhyme and such sound advice, but them of course you had the best to write from. Good luck! You'll get my applause.
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