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A Shattered Rose

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My garden gave me a beautiful rose clear as crystal glass
Reflecting hues of life's rainbow shinning through at last

Sun touching my sweet flower-enchanting was the glow
The gale came a blowing; where did my keepsake go?

Falling off my marble table onto the floor such clatter
My rose was in many pieces; I saw my rainbow shattered!

Deep within my broken heart my love for flower's compose
How do I calm my heart about this pretty shattered Rose?


I let go of natures ivory rose departed now, past
Kneeling in my garden where I grew the finest at last

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Written January 2nd, 2006

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  • malmadre gold member
    October 28

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    Looking out upon the garden, after a storm has passed and ravaged the ripe roses and their petals are strewn about, we get the same feeling when we drop a favorite keepsake, our breath catching in our throat. Very well done!

  • mama-drama
    October 14

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    Many poets write about flowers, but you did a unique job.metaphorically,this is such a heart wrenching poem giving a deep contrast in emotion.I love it.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 24, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • natchstucco
    January 14, 2008
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    I think this is a nice write that we all can relate to because I don't know anyone who has'nt dropped or broke a keepsake gift that was worth thier heart. I know I did and it hurt me as much as them.I think you have nice flow and a very keen rhyme going.


  • Beating gold member
    January 14, 2008

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    You really are a queen of imagery. I really like how you used metaphores and mixed feelings with nature. It made it quite unique, and I like that it is open to be interpret in whatever way people would like to. Good job!


  • PrincessOfFire
    February 24, 2006
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    This is a heart grabbing piece. You make the love so known throughout the poem. And in one part show truth to loves emotion, as you found the rose shattered, your love was so devoted. Thank you dor sharing.
    Rose


  • Shakes-spear
    February 23, 2006
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    This was very sad. I like the write, the shattered rose was not a good thing. Sometimes we don't understand why things happen in our lives, but there is and was a reason. God has someone else in mind for you I guess or maybe God was testing the bond between you two! Good job, The Shaker (Thanks for reading my stuff)


  • martinezjjoe
    February 16, 2006
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    great

    great poem real emotion


  • LovesWithTheBreeze
    February 13, 2006
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    I loved it from start to finish. It drew me in and I couldnt find anything negative in it. It was great. I feel a sadness in it that makes me want to keep reading. just beautiful! well done.


  • raingoddess gold member
    February 7, 2006
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    This is a beautiful poem, it is so sad that the crystal rose was broken, Great poe, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.

  • Rainies Dream 2468
    January 15, 2006
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    This is beautiful. I love everything about it. I'll be bookmarking it as well.


  • Breaking The Girl
    January 11, 2006
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    Ohh wow. This was just amazing. Such a beautiful piece of poetry... Everything about it was perfect... I did not find one single thing to criticize... I think I'll bookmark this.
    Amanda

  • kwallycat
    January 2, 2006
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    Oh, this is beautiful. I love it! it's a great write.

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