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The Fallen Sparrow

 


I was only eight years old and it was summertime on the farm
When I happened upon something that caused me great alarm
It was a baby sparrow that had somehow fallen from the nest.
I gently picked the little birdie up and held her to my breast.

 

The poor, wee critter, her beady eyes were wide with fear
And she certainly would have died without her mother near.
I wanted to return her to her nest high up in the tree
But I feared she would be rejected after being touched by me.

I'd heard in school that a baby bird, once touched by human hands,
Would be abandoned by her mother.  She wouldn't stand a chance!
So I carried her into the house and asked my father what to do.
He said, "You must nurse her back to health.  I'm afraid it's up to you."

So I went and found a shoebox and filled it up with cottonballs
And to simulate her natural home, I taped leaves to all the walls.
I wasn't sure what dad meant by "nurse" so I got the dictionary.
It said, "To nurse at the breast; to suckle."  This was getting scary!

I looked at the little bird and it seemed so small and weak
But I didn't like the idea of putting my nipple to that beak.
Besides, I didn't see the point.  I was a boy, for heaven's sake!
And nipples on boys had to be some kind of terrible mistake.

But my father's words rang in my ears.  What was I to do?
"You must nurse her back to health, my son.  It's up to you."
So I picked up the helpless creature and slowly lifted up my shirt.
She clamped right on. Yow! It's an understatement to say it hurt.

But the restoration of her health was fixed resolutely in my mind.
And I learned a valuable lesson - sometimes it's painful to be kind.
I gradually grew accustomed to the pain - very stoical and stony
And my nipples resembled partially masticated slices of pepperoni.

After a month or so, my little birdy finally stood up on wobbly feet.
And I thanked the Lord she'd no longer have to suckle at my teet.
I looked at my ravaged nipples and thought, "Wow! Mine work, too!"
Unaware that it was blood, not milk, that saw the sparrow through.

Author notes

Pine trees on a mountaintop.

Option 1 and option 4 a little.

I hope it's not too gross! (Specifically the "pepperoni" line. lol)

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  • AusStar gold member
    April 30

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    Concerned!

    Ok, second poem in a a row mentioning breasts, and of course there was the Blare Black Blest!! Do you have a fetish? LOL!!! Otherwise it was a brilliant poem, bit much for my sensitive stomach though.

    • Mark Rickerby gold member
      April 30
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      I do write about breasts a lot, don't I? I suppose I do have a fetish. Though the term "fetish" is usually applied to people who like unusual things, like feet (never understood that one), or shoes, in a kinky way. I don't know any man who doesn't like boobs. lol As Pepe Le Pew said, "Science tells us that there is very little difference between the male and female anatomy . . . but viva le difference!!!"

  • TizMoi
    March 25

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    Very funny indeed, brilliant, Can see the poor kid sitting with the dictionary looking up the definition and this made me laugh more. Good luck in the contest


  • CountryCousin
    March 25

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    Okay.

    Well I have heard this story before. Poor dear you did not realize that the bird grows feathers real fast. But alas the little sparrow did fly. Gives whole new meaning to breast feedings. Some babies latch on like that too.

  • tomboy01
    September 19, 2007

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    the pepperoni line wasn't as gross as the last one, but it should be okay, I think. It did make me laugh, though, the poem as a whole, I mean, so good job, and good luck too!

  • Laura Lamarca
    January 18, 2006
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    Hahaha....I didn't see that coming! That was funny Excellent word choice and rhyming in this. There are a few places where commas are needed, particularly in the 2nd stanza. This is a really good write and I thank you for sharing. La x

  • deercatcher
    January 12, 2006
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    Children misunderstanding the language is a solid source of humor. I remember so many of my and mines foibles. Great write!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 4, 2006
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    "Manboobs". hahaha

    Thanks for the comments. I'm glad I gave you a laugh. I hope MagicLady gets a chuckle or two out of it, too. What has made me laugh are the people who think this is true! Then again, maybe that says something about how people perceive my intelligence around here. lol

    Take care,

    Mark

  • J Rhys Davies
    January 4, 2006
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    Holy crap Mark! This was flipping funnier that hell. I loved it the whole way through. This got me laughing, imagining the look on the kid’s face when he saw the definition. Kind of like, “What the f---!” This was flipping hilarious brother.

    ~ John

  • Long Road Home
    January 4, 2006
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    Hahahaha! You had me going. Here I'm thinking you're going to report at the end that the poor thing died of starvation. Then you lead me on a bit with her survival and I'm waiting for the "miracle of the manboobs" ending and you go getting all practical and unexpected. Funny funny funny <- three funnies are better than two or one, and well deserved for this piece. Thanks for entering
  • sad-but-true
    January 3, 2006
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    Oh my god! I hope that this was just a story because if it is not I would be afraid that your nipples would never recover from such abuse. I would have to pray that someone would nurse you back to health. I love your sick humor it enlightens me to the fact that I am not alone. Great work and again thanks for the laugh. ~val~

  • Keith
    January 3, 2006
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    I've heard of a pelican feeding its brood with blood from its own breast, but never a nipple-pecking sparrow. You live and learn, don't you?

  • Maatkara Moderators member
    January 2, 2006
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    OMG! This brought tears to my eyes! You are such a nut! Hahaha! Good one, Mark

    ~Gen

  • SusanL
    January 2, 2006
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    You are so incredibly warped! I love it! When you go for it you go all the way. I hate to be the child that encounters that full grown bird in a year or two. hopefully it will have been weened to bugs and worms like all good sparrows should be!
    I think you will have our friend rolling with this one.
    Thank you for coming out to play and good luck!
    Susan

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 2, 2006
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    Ocerus,

    Weird, gross and funny? Yay, my mission is accomplished! lol

    Thanks for the comment. Please let me know which lines disrupt the rhythm if you have a minute. I've found that rhythm is largely dependent upon which words you emphasize while reading it, so it will read off to one person and on to another.

    Happy New Year!

    Mark


  • Night Hope gold member
    January 2, 2006
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    'I was eight years old and it was sweet summertime. I was out playing on the lawn with friends of mine When I saw a baby sparrow, fallen from the nest. I gently picked her up and held her to my breast...' roflmao Knowing you & your slighty~skewed humor, I saw this one comin', Mark... You, Sir, crack me up... Very cool penning, my Friend...& I, too, could well imagine some poor lil' boy taking his father's wisdom to Heart ~ literally... Good luck in the contest, my Friend... Wanda
  • ocerus
    January 2, 2006
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    Wow! This is weird, gross, funny, sad, and very, very good! The only problem I have with any of this is that your rhythm is kind of off sometimes. But this is a good poem, and will be a great one when you polish it up. Very good!

  • Zaria WindSong
    January 2, 2006
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    *giggles all day* I loved it!

  • MorningWinds
    January 2, 2006
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    Lmao,nice one.Great job

  • Gwenevere
    January 2, 2006
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    This was absolutely priceless.Laugh, well!!!!!!!!!!!!! Just the tonic I needed.He, He, He, He, I'm still laughing, Ros
  • faeorie
    January 2, 2006
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    I've had my cats hurt and maim a lot of animals, and though I always try to bring them back to health, they always end up dying. Though, it makes me happy that there's someone else out there who enjoys nursing fallen animals back to health. The world needs more kindred hearts, I think.

  • CountryCousin
    January 2, 2006
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    Really funny to read.

    Well I can see a boy doing this and getting into the thing with the bird. They do peck and well this is indeed a funny one. I always found eye droppers and bugs to suit the little birds.

  • Malabu
    January 2, 2006
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    lol Mark........your tattered nipples should had told you blood not milk.......dad taught you well......except mine taught me to be that sparrow...... .......anyone wanna nurse me back to health?......ummmmm Mark......I dont care for your torn and tattered nipples though....LOL.......love the story.....you did well ha ha...
    Happy New Year.....
    Malabu

  • January 2, 2006
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    Hahaha...wow, you really had me laughing at the end! Nice job!

  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    January 2, 2006
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    Hi Vickie,

    I did find a fallen sparrow and nurse it back to health, but the breast-feeding bit was added to make an otherwise boring story more interesting. lol I'm glad it gave you a laugh. It was fun to write. Thanks!

    Happy New Year!

    Mark

  • Vickie J
    January 2, 2006
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    LOL LOL LOL!!!! Tell me this wasn't true-because oddly enough, it seems like it could very well be.
    This had me cracking up! I could just visualize this little youngster being so determinded to see this bird survive and doing everything it took to ensure it did. Wonderful entry!!! Best wishes!~ vj
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