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kiss me tonight

kiss me tonight
kiss me now
kiss me under the starlight

our lost love will come to haunt us
your remnant kisses will kill me
our love has turn to rust

our dreams, pointless
pointless dreams have come to be
what has made me

Author notes

Its short but i wrote it at a lot of different times and now i am deciding it is done
Written January 2nd, 2006

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  • Corpse-Groom
    January 12, 2006
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    Intriguing

    Hmmm its intresting...Wildly intresting actually...You've matured a bit as a poet I must say...And thankfully kept your unique style without jepordizing who you are...Though i totally do not hate this piece...I kinda like it...* *lol* j/k its intresting...as i have said...
    I dont like the fact that the stanza's are a bit disjointed...But...its still great as it is.. *luvv ya and HAPPY NEW YEAR AND ALL THAT STUFF ME MISSED YOU...me might drop by occasionally...But not all the time. me out on Msn Spaces these days *luv ya much and keep true to yourself...Its so lovely on you...*


  • Maybe an Angel
    January 3, 2006
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    This is a good poem. Its interesting that you used three line stnazas as people usually use even numbers. I liked that a lot. I Like the strong message of it too. Good write!
    Muse


  • dormaness
    January 2, 2006
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    This is nice. I like the words and the way they flow.