Brown eyes,
so common, but his so
unique. Within them lies a passion
that burns like a wildfire beyond control.
With one glance they ignite a raging inferno deep
in the core of my being. The sincerity they possess
can turn chaos into serenity. The honesty that lingers
within them is almost frightening. The love they hold
shows the hopeless romantic that resides in him. One
can't help but fall victim to the tenderness that resonates
within them. From these eyes I have received a taste of
love deeper that ever before. It is with his eyes that my
soul has received the most breathtaking of kisses. The
warmest of embraces have wrapped around me
from his most innocent gaze. No sweetness
can be more pure than that of which seeps
through the most bewildering eyes
I've ever known.
Author notes
Written December 31st, 2005
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Thank you so much for entering! I love the way you structured the poem into an orb.... very interesting choice! I enjoyed reading the poem very much, and I just wanted to wish you good luck!
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I said it before, girlie, and I'll say it again, "this is absolutely breath-taking and ultra gorgeous! Thank you for sharing it with me again! I feel quite honored that you entered the contest, sister! Love ya muches!
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Wow, I wouldn't mind getting a peek at those eyes! This is a great poem. I love the shape.
The twelvth line has one typo, I think you meant than instead of that...otherwise, a very powerful poem!
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My friend, this is absolutely breath-taking and ultra gorgeous! The love you hold for this man just seems to ooze out of every poem you pen!
Another wonderful write and I thank you so much for sharing!
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Must be some mezemoring eyes sis
Loved this and love the shape as well
Happy New Year 2006 to my sis
Love n hugs
Susan~~~
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I am so pleased that a smile comes about from my writes. It makes me feel good to know they have made another feel the love and joy
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Oh my dear Wayne
You always say the most lovely things.
The best part of writing this piece was the fact that I need not have bothered to look upon a picture to remind me of what I see and feel within said such eyes. For they are locked in my mind and heart.
And now I am off to my sister's house to claim everyone's money in a wonderful rousing game of poker
If I do not see you I wish you a most joyious new year my dear!
Blessings
Bel
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You go auntie. You make me smile so much with these writes. Sometimes that is a blessing in and of itself. XOXOXO Ciao now.
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Well, technically, it is technical; esthetically it is fitting, the mechanics are errorless, the grammar- no mistakes, the message communicated clearly, and the raw emotion is dripping with your internal, frothing, mesmerizing unavoidable passion that bursts from your blazing heart and mind through the intervening screen and wraps my entire bodily essence in your wonderfully deep emerald virtual gaze and spine-tingling longing embrace of which there is no escape... and while we are locked in mutual virtual desire my mind resounds with your name like a thousand Sundays in Southern Comfort... my Bel!
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For this is what lies in those eyes when I look within them. I am pleased I could bring back such a memory for you.
I humbly thank you for your kind words
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very well done
having the poem shaped round is brilliant and clever. you've described some tantalizing eyes...i've been lucky enough to experience the same...just as your words show. you've reminded me of that
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Whew!! I would love to see those eyes. This is good!!
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I'm pleased you liked this piece.
Thank you for your kind words
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wow.
this is excellent. i love the shape you put into the poetry, and the words you chose were absolutely perfect. wonderful imagery. great job. thank you so much for entering my contest. good luck and keep writing!
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