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Two Strikes

She always keeps me guessing
a student of the game
she knows just when to sneak the curve
and when to bring the flame
She never shows a weakness
and mercy's not her thing
I'm standing here with two strikes
this might be my last swing



You just can't be for certain
who knows what she'll throw next
her feelings hidden behind her back
it leaves this man perplexed
Emotion's bases loaded
it's inning number nine
I'm standing here with two strikes
the game is on the line



My friends, I'm not a coward
I'm known to crowd the plate
but she cheats when she plays at love
and it might be too late
She's winking at the catcher
I bound to take a fall
I've got two strikes and dammit
she's spitting on the ball.




Rakerman

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Written December 31st, 2005

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  • I will stand by you
    May 8, 2007
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    this is such a perfect write.


  • Ellis gold member
    February 1, 2006
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    Terrific

    God! This is SUCH great stuff!


  • SaintCommon
    January 1, 2006
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    Very funny my friend, well done. I like the use of the baseball analogy. I'm loving the double meaning though, in the first stanza. she knows when to "sneak the curve". Very clever sir, very clever. I really like emotions bases being loaded and I just really, really like her always cheating at love. I don't know why, it just works. My favorite line is the ender though. "She's spitting on the ball" is just a perfect ender. It says so much of her er..um talent. Anthor good write Rakerman. Au Revoir.
    - The Common Saint


  • Legend silver member
    January 1, 2006
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    Seriousness wrapped in humour such a wonderful combination. It makes this piece even more powerful .I love the flow so easy to read and though not into Baseball i do know the examples given and applaud you for the creative way you used the game to put over you points Great job my friend

  • artemisia
    January 1, 2006
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    i like it! the rhyming and rhythm makes it such an ease to read, despite the fact that i'm not a sports person. despite the situation, i can tell that the narrator is still fond of the girl.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    December 31, 2005
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    Oh this is just too funny. I know women (and men) like that! This is almost sad but the way you wrote it, I can't help but laugh. I love baseball, in fact my uncle (died last year) was a professional baseball player. This is wonderful. Three cheers for this one!

    ~Lyrical

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