random weaves of rugged bark
writhe against the phasing skies
that drift beyond capricious leaves
roots extend throughout a dozen worlds
winding deep into the plane of dreams
to brush the wayward mind like strokes of wind
weathered plates of charcoal gray
shift and slide into the air as
random weaves of rugged bark
tendrils cleave the mists from drought to draught
driven to explore domains of light
winding deep into the plane of dreams
vapors breathe against the moon
raising plumes within the void
that drift beyond capricious leaves
solar cells fan out as emerald lobes
along dynamic conduits of growth
driven to explore domains of light
mosses clothe erratic limbs
climbing toward inconstant heights up
random weaves of rugged bark
colors dance across elusive grains
in gradual pilgrimage through subtle realms
along dynamic conduits of growth
russet rustles greet the stars
when cloud-breaks split the stormy nights
that drift beyond capricious leaves
like ripples cast by gentle drops of rain
rings expand through time as branches reach
in gradual pilgrimage through subtle realms
stardust rises from the earth
to sing across the depths of space on
random weaves of rugged bark
that drift beyond capricious leaves
beneath the spread of tangible mirage
roots extend throughout a dozen worlds
rings expand through time as branches reach
to brush the wayward mind like strokes of wind
Author notes
to learn more about the hybridanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/1086828/all=1
Written December 29th, 2005
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great write, some fantastic use of words in here, tendril, plume, tangible, wonderfully surreal and mysterious, interesting
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Another great write! I really enjoy your poetry. The background really sets it off. Amazing never ending images. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing
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a very nice poem and an equally wonderful background, truly does enhance the reading and experience of the content. blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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awsome poem
beautiful imagery,pretty words i enjoyed it!!!! -
IHAVE NEVER READ YOUR WORK. A VERY PEACEFUL POEM…LIKE AS WAS RIGHT THERE, RESTING UNDER THE TREE. BEAUTIFUL.
MARY-JANE NOEL
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This remindes me of the woods i use to hunt in. The view was majestic and I use to stare up at the trees in awe while waiting for a little critter to climb out of a nest. Off the point but anyway I pictured a painting while i read this as if was being painted while I read along. Your words were that real. WOW!
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jeeze~ this is great! ahh im jealous o.o lol awesome poem i loved the wording and the descriptions. keep up the great work!!
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So lovely. The delivery and the use of form helps the reader
to forget it is being measured by a 'form ruler'.
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Amazing
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i really liked this, except the line' random weaves of rugged bark' crops up twice i think? really liked it anyway
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Ooooh. This was very misty and ethereal... lots of great words and wonderful adjectives... the structure was interesting. I'm off to learn about this 'hybridanelle' form. Curious.
Elizabeth
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excellent
Very beautiful and imaginative. Extremlly vivid. Enjoyed it very much. Keep writting -
i love the structure and flow of this "hybridanelle"
i will look up the explanation of the form
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Erin, real good write. i fell just as the name implies it was the mighty oak dreaming of its own life and the effects of its self on its environment, and the environment as well as interesting and open. image and visions
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Exceptional offering here Erin! A balm to the eye!
Congratulations on this Erin!
John -
this is very good I like the this, you touched on several different thems through out this poem, which I felt gave this poem sorta of unique touch then alot poem you read. Over all a very well written poem.
Much love
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nice job. this poem is very well written. i love the way that it is open for interpratation. most poems have one blunt meaning but this one is open to the oppinion of the reader. i like poems like that. i also like how it is such a vivid picture yet not so vivid that the meaning is screaming your name. i love the picture that the words paint. nicely done and keep it up.
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Magical. Your words scream with spraks of wonder. It flowed well and the structure was solid. No poet could say otherwise, congradulations.
Brandon -
Great words and a great structure.
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Sure do like this one. Will learn more about it for sure. Great background, wonderful images. Just awesome.
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"Tangible mirage." Erin, I love this write! The poetic expression is astounding! Many mirages in my life have proved to be real, especially when others have seen them. You did good here. Keep it up! Love, light and peace to you and yours!--Kel
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peaceful
Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful. Such great words. -
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Oh my love. You've worked wonders with the hybridanelle form once more. The refrains are so well woven into the piece, I hardly notice the repeated lines. The background is fantastic and perfect for this piece. lol (as you well know) I might have to borrow it sometime.
The words that make up the poem really bring the tree's soul to light in a way that is so beautiful. It is a shame that so many people are unable to see beyond the bark of these majestic creatures.
Wifey Maab
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ilr: btw, there's an email that accompanies each of my project poems. if you're curious about the inspiration behind this poem, its intent, its prosody, the schemes consciously employed, and other thoughts in relation to it, im me with your email address and i'll send you a copy.
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Erin, I really liked this poem, it has so many differnt meanings that can be taken from each line that it keeps you intriged until the very end. For me this poem is not so much about an oak tree but more about the human mind and life in general and how many different phases we tend to go through in our lifetime yet our roots are always planted strong in one place. My favorite lines from this has to be this one
"roots extend throughout a dozen worlds
winding deep into the plane of dreams
to brush the wayward mind like strokes of wind"
Your hybridanelles are outstanding, they all have such depth.
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"to brush the wayward mind like strokes of wind" is a fine line!
Jake -
i always love reading your hybridanelles and others villanelles. i love their form and the way people manage to put them together.i have tried an failed miserably to write them.
your poem had such imagery and is beautifully written!
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this is all i can say about this poem great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great great and once again great
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Brilliantly Accomplished
A beautiful beautiful piece Erin. You never cease to amaze me
This new found form is indeed a marvel for me. thank you for sharing it. your column was most useful and informative. Again, thank you.
Beautiful choice of words. The Flow was extremely captivating. A Cauldorn of Beauty.
Lots of Philia,
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this is a beautiful poems and almost trancends a discriptions, it borders on the ehteral and i might have to go back and read some of the other ones so that i can comprehend it more
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ethreal
I could almost picture the scene of trees and leaves and expanse of sky. I admire your use of the hybridanelle. Lovely.. -
Very Nice
Oh it's a really pretty poem. I like the imagery. It's uplifting for me, especially since I like to pick out the emotions of trees. "beneath the spread of tangible mirage, roots extend throughout a dozen worlds" possibly my favorite word use on all poems I've ever seen on AP. Amazingly well done. -
Really nice piece - very elegant and flowing, with lovely imagery throughout. Some of the imagery seems a little overdone, however, but overall, a good poem
LLLSHJ,
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This was so good I couldn't stop reading until the end. It drew deep into your thoughts. Way cool!! Haley27
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classical.. something that i never done before.. well.. your piece is one of the best i've red so far... he he he he great job...
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that was just so beautiful this poem is an instant classic of the poetry world a true work of art thank you for sharing this wonderful piece
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Hi, brilliant, this is your form and I would feel it would be almost impossible to do better than thisin this form, very lovely feel,I really must get downto trying this form, I prefer it to the standard villanelle,happy new year, hugs Di
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i had never heard of that form of poetry before, so it looks like you did a good job. thanks for sharing. keep it up. peace
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Just wanted to let you know that I stopped by, I think after I reread this, and can correlate my thoughts, I will comment more
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Marvellous
Once again you have worked wonders with the language. I particularly liked the contrasts, not only the obvious ones such as drought to draught but the more subtle ones such as the(soft) tendrils that (harshly) cleave the mist and the (powerful) winding roots that (lightly) brush the mind.
Add to this such wonderous touches as russett rustles and you have produced a wonderful poem.
Jim S -
Wonderful
Beautiful images..
It wavers through the mind like a dream, casting shadows where the trees should be making me drift off into a dream world where nothing could ever go wrong.
Nature is truely awe inspiring, nothing quite beats a beautiful poem that you can almost see and touch the wood grain of the tree.. smell the hearty scent of the forest.
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Fantastic!
I love forms I have never seen before, such an adventure to discover them! This one pulls you into the poem, and in this case the Oak, very artfully done! A fantastic reading experience! -
This is excellent. I really like how you described the tree in detail from the leaves to the roots. You also chose your words really well. I enjoyed it a lot. Good work.
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OMG!!!!! What flow!!!! AMazing imagery....and the choice of words was just mind-blowing. A lot of it just went over my head, but WOW!!!! Well done dude.
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Exquisite
Not familiar with this form, but you certainly make it look easy (and I'm sure it's not)! The imagery and repetition were well blended. This is a fine piece of art. -
You've painted quite a beautiful landscape here. I'm not familiar with this form of writing so I will not comment on it as such. While you gently stroke through seasons the vision that stands out is bare branches streaking across a winter sunset. Roots bared and exposed. Yet for me, this is the most beautiful time a tree possesses as it show the true character of the tree. How like nature is so much like we humans. No two being the same. Thank you for sharing. I don't know that I could write this form and keep ones attention as you have.
~Michelle~
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Important
Whilst reading this I pictured a mighty, singular Quercus Robur in all its majesty, existing through seasons and providing existence for others. "when cloud-breaks split the stormy nights" is such a brilliant line! For me, this feels an important piece of work. I also think of summer days, lazing under the village Oak with a good pint of beer -
well done
'good piece...... so wonderfully emotional penned. good rhythm,good word choice, nice easy flow. beautiful imagery. Great write. Absolutely brilliant, my friend!!!........my fav lines.....
roots extend throughout a dozen worlds
winding deep into the plane of dreams
to brush the wayward mind like strokes of wind
weathered plates of charcoal gray
shift and slide into the air as
random weaves of rugged bark
tendrils cleave the mists from drought to draught
driven to explore domains of light
winding deep into the plane of dreams
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hi erin, can i share this poem of yours to my fellow writers? just to show them an example of hybridanelle?
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I love this, all the lines are deep in their won way, yet so different. I really thgis is is beautiful! Good write... no, great write!
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