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The Simple things in life.

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Too soon my dear
to raise your head,
and glimpse a little
sky;


Too cold my love
to tempt the breeze..
with icicles in your
bed;


Too grey my sweet
as winter swirls, in
dark December days.


Alone, un-sheltered
courage flares to burst
through heaven and hell.


Stark beauty lies upon
the face of nature's victory
walk.


Don't hide your face against
the wind, stand proud with
head held high.


You are the first but not the last ..
I often wonder why.


 

 

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Written December 29th, 2005

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  • Rhythm Child
    November 19, 2008

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    A great entry
    thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care

    message me for anything
    Billy (Rhythm Child)


  • Catie Sheeran
    November 18, 2008

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    this is divine .. love your style of writing


    • cutiepie gold member
      November 19, 2008
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      Thank you Catheryn Ann Delighted that you enjoyed it

  • cutiepie gold member
    January 6, 2006
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    It is, whatever you want it to be that is the magic...the ability to allow a little of ourselves into our perception of the written word I love how people often see more in something that I write than I had originally intended...is it my subconscious working when I am not looking...or is it that I cannot see what others see.. it is what we want it to be


  • jezz-aussi
    January 6, 2006
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    "You are the first but not the last ..
    I often wonder why."

    I really love those lines.

    I adore the fact that you personified the flower so skillfully. If not for the picture, I would have thought you were speaking of a person. Perhaps in a metaphorical sort of way, you are?

    This is incredibly well written. Thank you for sharing it.

    Love and light,

    Jenna


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 31, 2005
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    Thank you Glad you enjoyed it

  • SIlEnTbRoKeNaNgEl
    December 31, 2005
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    good

    it's short and sweet i like it alot


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    You are very kind Many thanks for the comments and the applause, it is appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you Zorg your kind remarks are appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you Kirby for the comments and the applause


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you Jen for your kindness


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Very much the same Thank you for your kind remarks as always they are very much appreciated


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Your comments are always greatly appreciated Many thanks


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you Rose Delighted that you enjoyed it


  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Why thank you ..I shall certainly look up you page and see what treasure lurk

  • cutiepie gold member
    December 30, 2005
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    Thank you for your comments. I appreciate them and take on-board your remark regarding standing alone Many thanks


  • joybug
    December 30, 2005
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    good effort

    Great write. A little vague as to whom or of what you are speaking. Without the picture it would be clueless. You might think of making this strong enough to stand alone without the picture.


  • jewel4Him
    December 30, 2005
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    wow u definitely have a way of putting words 2gether i'll look 4ward 2 reading some more of ur poems please read my poems (i only have 3) my favorite is the Choice of Life if u only want 2 read 1 iunderstand please make it the Choice of Life


  • rosepoet
    December 30, 2005
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    good piece...... so wonderfully emotional.good rhythm,good word choice, nice easy flow. beautiful imagery. Great write. Absolutely brilliant, my friend!!!........Too soon my dear
    to raise your head,
    and glimpse a little
    sky;
    Too cold my love
    to tempt the breeze..


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 30, 2005
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    a beaautiful work

    well i don't understand whether poet ..whether metaphors ...whether the lover of the poet or..whether the impact of the poem..who is the ONE doing the eternal journey of this great nature through and through too with a deep meaning of the deep of the love ..the love from the heart too. It is just a beautiful work by the poet bringing the nature on the front by just few simple expressions here in this write.The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I relly appreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar


  • Roseycheeks15
    December 30, 2005
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    Great

    wow!
    I love it made me feel great.Good luck on your future poems
    If u can check some of my poems that would be great see ya

    ~Rosey~


  • LadyUnique silver member
    December 30, 2005
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    i thought of the crocus and daffodil as i read this. then i thought of human spirit struggling through the rough times. one and the same me thinks
    very elegant. i applaud the poet and the poem


  • UnchartedPoet
    December 29, 2005
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    Perfect

    Oh this is a wonderful write.....I love this piece, I can feel a personal tone to this, touches ones inner strength and yet it still can be that struggle for that new flower bud to over come all of natures wrath to finally blossom, oh how this just screams an inner struggle for someone to have strength to overcome objects in life, we all have it inside, just finding that key to trigger a response for one to burst out of their shell that may be holding them back.....KUDOS for this two fold write my friend...KUDOS.......

    Jen


  • moonling
    December 29, 2005
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    I love this one and the way your words bring the buds struggle to life.Well done and keep writing.I look forward to reading more by you.


  • romanticadventure
    December 29, 2005
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    wow. the rhythem to this poem is hypnotic. I never thought so deeply about a budding flower, good poetry makes the ordinary stand out, which is why this is a really good write.

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