It's a little bit funny this feeling inside
My heart beat races when you are near
I bury these emotions, so easy to hide
It's a little bit funny this feeling inside
I have only poems in which to confide
But I’d like the whole world to hear
It's a little bit funny this feeling inside
My heart beat races when you are near
I know it's not much but it's the best I can do
Writing words of love’s anticipation
Hoping you have these same feelings too
I know it's not much but it's the best I can do
Maybe some day, these feelings I’ll pursue
And relieve my heart of wanton hesitation
I know it's not much but it's the best I can do
Writing words of love’s anticipation
Anyway the thing is what I really mean
I’ll love you forever and forever more
Wishing to reveal these feelings unseen
Anyway the thing is what I really mean
Within your embrace, I feel so serene
You are the only one that I truly adore
Anyway the thing is what I really mean
I’ll love you forever and forever more
Author notes
I have used three lines taken from Elton John’s “Your Song” – www.eltonography.com/songs/your_song.html
“It's a little bit funny this feeling inside”
“I know it's not much but it's the best I can do”
“Anyway the thing is what I really mean”
Written December 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Trippin on Triolets by SusanL.
400 points, ended January 4, 2006, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Standing as I applaud!!!!!
John, I just wrote a huge comment praising you for this awesome write from my most favorite artist. Only to have the system go down on me. Good thing it wasn't the sun, like my entry. LOL
Everything about this was superb. The flow, rhythm and rhyme. Kudos to you fellow poet and thank you so much for sharing this work of art with all of us. Love and blessings for you, today and always 
Joyce
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Sweet sentiments and a new poetry form (for me). It is romantic and endearing and utterly caring, especially since you choose poetry to express such tender feelings.
I have not tried my hand at any such forms yet...sigh. So, I'll just keep coming back to read yours. 
Karen -
Wonderful read. There was a sense of familiarity with some of the words, but I didn't really know what it was until I read your author's notes. That is good though, as I love Elton John, but you wove the lines you used in so as not to have them jumping out at me. Nice flow that kept me till the end and wonderful warm sentiment. It rings of sincerity and has a nice musical flow.
Oh, and Happy New Year!!
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Hey John great work here, interesting concept as well. I hope you stay SAFE this New Years! I think your bit aways from where I'm at but we just got pounded with rain not a good combo on New Years for driving.
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Very enjoyable, I love Elton John songs he is a real artist. I love how you used his words in this poem. Well done, you never cease to amaze me, every poem of yours is so different and delightful. This gives a different feel and mood with someone's words. Happy New Year John!
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Wow, I really like this, its really beautiful. Isn't heartbeat one word?
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great job here Mr.Davies...you did a great job on this and i think i might try one of this form myself...you always reassure me that there are some good guys left in the world...best of luck in the contest...
God Bless
~tyler -
You make a girl feel all mushy inside. John you are a romantic through and through, it shows here and in so mch of your writing.
Some day the right one will come along and you will live happily ever after forever and forever more!
Thank you for this lovely entry and good luck
Susan -
A most excellent entry to the challnge. I especially like the line choice for the first partm, it just seems so ideal for love poetry. Good luck in the contest. ~Jim
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I love the song, and your triolet brings in your personal dimension. What's not to like? Very well done, John.
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For some guys this line "I’ll love you forever and forever more" has a very untrue ring to it but i know that you wouldnt say it unless you mean through and through...i just know that.
A very heartfelt romantic piece here John - enough to make that special girl of yours hand over her heart. Bravo...loved it! -
John, this is a lovely poem. You've taken the essence of Sir Elton John's song and made it your own. This flows beautifully for having so many links. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
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