When I was five years old
The class was playing duck duck goose
My crush tapped me and said goose, as we ran
It started to feel as if my tooth was loose
Then he grab my hand
As we sneak behind the maple tree
He pushes me against it
And he began to kiss me
At first the was great
He lips against mine
Now tongue kissing
But everything was fine
We're still behind that tree
We're still kissing
This was like heaven
That's when the teacher realized we were missing
As she starts her search
As I'm thinking, KISSES , I want more of those
Neither one us has ever kissed before
Yet I thought it was odd that his tongue was up my nose
But I figured he knew more about this than me
We continued to kiss while the teacher's still looking
Now my mouth is feeling funny
Like something is unhooking
I ignored the weird feeling
Then the teacher looked south
Then he stops and spits something out
To my surprise he had my loose tooth in his mouth
We were caught by her
Our action she could not defend
He walked away and that's when I knew
We would never kiss again
Author notes
This is the first humor poem I've ever written. But that kiss was horrible!
Written December 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Your First... by Pallas Athena.
300 points, ended April 20, 2006, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I just saw it on tv and wanted to try it. But look at where it got me. LOL! Thanks for the comment.
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lol thats funny... but sort of sweet too.personally i think 5 is a lil young 4 a first kiss but o well this is still a cewl poem...
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I wish he would have. He still jokes me about it. LOL! But it's all good though. Thanks for reading.
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at least he didn't choke on the tooth. hahahah! this is really cute and it is so much fun to read!
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P.S. Have fun judging!
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I hope no other child does this. LOL!
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Yeah, this is funny.. I can only hope my childern don't do this though!! Thanks for entering! Athena
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LMAO.. this was very humorus and I like that... You did stick to the topic well enough for me as I am not extremely picky about it.. I just dont like being asked for a completely different option... Great write though.. very entertaining
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Thanks and yes you can say it was TRAGIC because that's a great word to describe that kiss. But now I think was it as the funniest event in my life. Thank you for your comment and applause.
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Very nice write, very tragic kiss... I guess you can say tragic. I bet that wasn't how you expected that a first kiss would be.
lol
good job and good luck with the contest
-sosha -
Reading a pro's work like your's rubbed off on me a little. Thanks for the comment.
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very funny
lol.. bravo.. you can do humour just fine see..
Go Girl -
That's fine. And I glad that you and your cousin loved it.
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Thank you. You always give me positive fedback. I appreciate that a lot!
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haha that's cute sis! Great job i loved it!!! sorry it took so long for me to read it.. I have just had company and it's rude to be on the computer when I have company.. oh and my cousin loved your poem too!! Great job!
~Amber~ -
this is really good and it made me laugh kinda on sum parts i loved this keep it up thanx for sharing really enjoyed reading this keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
love ya
~*becca*~
you are a great writer
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Thanks I guess that's a good way to look at it.
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this was adorable, memories like this one is truly cherished.
you did a really good job.There are some suggestions if you don't mind reading..I can IM them if you want..but other than that Good luck in the contest. Brenda -
HAHAHAHAHAHA!! that is so funny! at least you got your tooth out much easier! but what i wonderful way to remember your first kiss! my sympathy to you hon! LOL! As Always~Molli
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Thanks Cuzzy!
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Wow, you exceed yourself. My bestest bestest bestest congratulations really. You nailed this. It needs some editing and grammar stuff but what matters is the story pixie mine. So pixie dollface beauty. My heart in this moment beats for you. Ciao now.
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There were! Thank you for your comment!
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AHHHHHHHAHAhAHAHAHAHA! that is the funniest thing i think i have ever read in my intire life!!!!!what a terrible experience! sorry hon! hopeful all the later kisses were better!LOL! Loves~Jamie
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Thank you.
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Hey, Hey, Jay,
ROFL! This was so funny! It made me remember my first kiss at about the same age. I hadn't thought about that in years. It was good to remember, unforunatly it de - thrones the young lady that I had thought was my first kiss, LOL. She will have to settle for first real kiss, or maybe first grown up kiss. I don't know, first something, lol.
Good job Jay,
EYEC
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Yep it seriously happen. And that wasn't interesting, it was weird and felt nasty. Thanks for your comment and applause.
Your Cuz
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haha aww this is funny, did it seriously happen?? and the tongue in your nose... that has to be interesting...
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Thank you auntie! I appreciate your comment. It means a lot. And I cannot believe that the leader of an erotic group use to be a wallflower. But thanks for your comment and applause!
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This girl is NOT a wall flower!!:f
So cute! This was your first kiss?? I dont remember mine...ROFL...didnt have much time for boys in the flesh, though I loved them very much from afar...i had always wished one would come up to me and ask to kiss me, but they just never did! Later I found out cuz they were intimidated by him...what a joke! ROFL such a wallflower i was...admire the pretty wallpaper, but you couldnt really pick the flower. Good luck in the contest, Jerrika.....i think this was very, very sweet. I love to hear stories like this!!!!!
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