It hangs by a thread In body and spirit transparent and ghostly then it's ramcomnemremerated deframimillimoggilated and then quite tragically retransified Bold and charming to the end like a seed found in the ground Fat and rotund It waits for meat, ever dieting creepy monsterous incomplete icky, sticky, anti-neat frothing, belching, popping, lean never licks its platter clean in the midday summer heat waiting for you to call its name... It! |
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written in the form \Pinheadaeous Formicus Numberous Twous e tu Inverticus...\
Written December 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- The Bold Truth by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended January 3, 2006, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thank you very much, honorary mother! there were many fine entries!
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*Congratulations on the Bronze win sweetheart! Excellent work!
Renee
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Congratulations on the picking up the bronze!
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Thank you very much, honorary mother! and a Happy New Year to you and yours!
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This is very clever. I love the internal rhymes strug throughout. The messgae is elusive;
“Failures are more finely etched in our minds than triumphs, and success is an elusive, if not mythic, goal in our demanding society” (Hugh Drummond).
A very artistic presentation here as well. Ah! The perks of Gold membership. LOL Very accomplished work here my honorary son. The best to you in this challenge.
Much Love,
Renee (Mom)
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Work of an artist!
IT ! Sounds like one of those science fiction movies, or one of the horror movies that something is dangling in the air that you can't see yet it is very deadly for it is flesh eating!
Well, where did you get those words.. lol.. they are deep..
"mashmentified reposifified
then it's ramcomnemremerated deframimillimoggilated "
You are an artist of great talents and in this poem, each reader will have its own interpretation of the of the whole meaning!
Actually this is really excellent!
Good work!
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Thank you kindly, Ms. December! Your opinion is valued greatly, and i believe comes straight from the heart!
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Brilliant!
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thanks, Corey... now tif didn't make you say that, did she?
lol glad you liked 'It'...
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good
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Well, I'll be darned-ed-ed! It does seem to be about a spider, oh bright one! lol and I did not have that in mind when I wrote it!
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WOW... this is very interesting!!! It seems to me that it is about a spider!!! LOL... Good luck in the contest!!!
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thanks, Anasuya, because odds are I'll be tinkering with this one! lol
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Ahaha. I like the emphasis on "it". lmfao. Make that pronoun stand out! Seeing as how it's the only one I allow in this contest Interesting, abstract, and a whole lot to read in the few lines here. I'll be revisiting this piece before the contest closes.
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