Oh, sweet honey, golden and silky
Oh, sweet bullseye, caramel cream milky
But I know someone sweeter than candy
Isn't that fine, isn't that dandy?
I can't see that kite, how far can it fly?
Lost in the intensity of a satin sky.
But I know things that take me higher than the stars
Just for that, I needn't walk far
Luminescent finned fish skulk in the sea
Deeper than darkness, where I can't see
But I know things more profound than those,
Deeper than the red of a velveteen rose.
Who knew whales could be so huge?
Never to be lost in an ocean's deluge
The planet is big, the universe too
But none compare to my love for you.
Author notes
Ah... I can't believe I wrote that...
Option 1
Written December 28th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Sappy love stuff by Janetheplain.
300 points, ended February 16, 2006, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romance of the Heart by Liquid memories.
525 points, ended November 26, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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filled with delightful feelings. success in the contest.
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uh wow. that was so adorable. i wasnt expecting it to go the way it did. but i love the last line. (last lines always get me) and that was just amazing. I like the kite and the rose part. that was just wow. thanks for entering my contest. good luck! -Ebi-
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this is so sweet! i reall y like this and i think you definately will do good in the contest!!
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This poem is excellent! I loved every bit of it! But here are a few of my favorite lines:
I can't see that kite, how far can it fly?
Lost in the intensity of a satin sky.
Luminescent finned fish skulk in the sea
Depper than darkness, where I can't see
But I know things more profound than those,
Deeper than the red of a velveteen rose
Absolutly amazing! I love it! Great write!
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did you mean deeper? this was a lovely metaphor..I can't do that for the life of me..especially when it comes to sex..This was just wonderful.
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Truly a wonderful love poem you have here . I love the flow and the rhyme scheme is awsome. So much emotion and very nice imagery. Very nice work!
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