Please understand that I wake every morning
Only to see your smile and know it's mine.
But this morning I couldn't find that smile
And I haven't stopped shedding tears.
You're the candle which lights my path
When all lights have gone out.
But this morning I fell over myself
Because I couldn't find my way.
Please understand I hate myself
More and more each day that comes around.
Because I know I'll never be perfect
To anyone, including you.
You're my food and water I live off
And I do not need anything more.
Every time we part I wonder how long
It will be before I see you again.
I love you with all my heart
And I will keep telling you that.
Until all hope has failed
And I know I'm nothing.
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Written December 27th, 2005
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Sad
I am speachless after reading this...
truly amazing Meri as usual
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very good i enjoyed reading this your words painful visuals shown very nicely
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aw, this was a cute one. sad though. romantic and very true/genuine. Liked it! enjoyable reading this well expressed poem!
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Thank you so much for your comment. It means a great deal to me
My poems are better when I'm feeling what I'm writing. Like with this one. I just wrote another poem. That's why I am late replying to your comment.
Thank you, again
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very touching and powerful
This is just so beautiful and true,very touching and heartfelt,explains the power of love,powerful and very true,with every emotions and words,,it's like a powerful song
Love is the best ever,this is just explains it all
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...all i can say is i want to cry now...
powerfully written, and very relateable as how i would think most people would be able to relate to this feeling of wanting nothing more than to be loved by the person that you love, and just wanting them and nothing more...i also think everyone can relate to the aspect of feeling like we are nothing without the love of another...
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sad but lovely work. Great emotion and flow of words and thought. Thank you and keep up the great writes
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What a beautiful poem. Truly, it is wonderful. The emotion is there and you created a perfect atmosphere for this very poem. I am happy I read it.
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Aww, this flowed every so nicely. You have a wonderful talent, i'm sorry you feel this way! If there's anything i can do, let me know! Here's a
and a 
i know its not much, but .. i hope it can help in some way! This is a beautiful poem, and if you really look for the GOOD in you, you'll be okay. No one is perfect dear, we all know that, just try to look to the best of everything. I love you, and i know many others do. And if not - well, I DO!
All my love-
Stephani -
OK all I can say is
OUTSTANDING WORK!!!
that poem really spoke to me it made me think of my religon (bad spelling) my god and our line you might say.
I never had girl friend but I have got lots girls for friends...
I love this work
From
Xantech Spearbone
or
Quad Cannon
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This is great. It's how I feel most of the time, too. ^_^
Keep writing, you have major talent.
*Rachael* -
very sad and desperate and a very good write. i wanted to cry when i read it becuz it reminded me of my ex boyfriend. i didn't know how much he meant to me till i lost him and then for awhile i couldn't see my way so to speak to anything or even see the light that is my future. i can now though and this poem brings me back to that time and i love this poem for that.
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What a beautiful comment from Dooku, I relate to this poem, it's exactly how I feel at the moment. Good write Meri. I could leave you a comment with more integrity than this.. But actually, I couldn't. I've lost my comment ability. Actually I'm just having a rough night.
Confuss. -
hello how are you im fine thx so lalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalala Big Triddy is very bored so im gunna just blabber
so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so so lalalalalalalalalalalalalala very bored lol um ill tlk 2 u right now on msn and this most definetly is over 100 characters long so tlk 2 u in a sec
Big Triddy -
ive alread commented on it but i want 2 again
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trust u to say that travis heh
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Oh
that is so sad! Here's a hug, I think you could do with one >>>>
I love some of the imagery in this, especially the first and second line of the second stanza. I can relate to self-hatred you convey as well which is quite possibly all in your mind. Now, I'm not trying to make out that you're psychotic, but sometimes we all beat ourselves up about ourselves for whatever reason and we really shouldn't.
A desperately sad picture you have painted here, but I think that was your intention, so well done.
Much love,
Julie xxxx
P.S: I read your entire author page and didn't yawn once!
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Geometry can be perfect...
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ok pples can nyone actually explain perfection? or define it ?cause perfection is one of those things along with love. it is different to every single person in this universe.great poem meri i hope things pan out alright im sure they will cause u two are too good to let nything slide.
luv beck
p.s message me if u have a response to my question.
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BRILLIENT better than my poetry
awwww..... Meri ur perfect 2 me and undy said 2 him aswell just the way u are Meri is all the way u need 2 b
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Yes, you hit a nerve there...souch a sad and heart-felt reading poem. Well done (many claps). It just takes the breath away in a not-so-good way (but very artistic).
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Perfection isn't everything, and nothing's perfect.
Remember that. And remember you're a great poet.
Luv M -
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good advice I agree
Meri read this every time you want to question it!
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welll i can see many a thoughts have gone into this... but the part:
“ Please understand I hate myself
More and more each day that comes around
Because I know I'll never be perfect”
your damm right no one is perfect. i know you don't like me telling you what this means when u say it.. i know u think i'm a fool but i'm gonna say it anywayz..
it's not that you hate who you are.. it's that you dislike the fact that u wanna be something great and helpful to all but in turth your no were near.. please understand that been every ones hero means their will be consequences for you.
If you don't do something right or have dealt with a situations in a slightly worse way then what you could hope to do.. don't get up tight of it i'm sure u have given more then your sure of heroism in the past year
Ii think it's time you start looking after your self a lil more.. if you stay in the dark, if you stay the same person every year it becomes way to unhealthy for you ( even says so in the college year bookJ) a healthy person is one who assesses who they are often.. then changes aspects about them frequently... be more saponatus , don't just be the same sharing loving considered person you are to every one els every year.. un unfortunately wether you like it not people abuse and use that that aspect about you to their advantage more often then u may think.... try and learn instead of never saying no to sum one, try and so yeah I’ll help but l8ter after i do something for myself 1st.. I know that sounds extremely bad... but for god sakes women have a lil respect for your self and look after your soul and body...
i mean their are so many hundreds of people who are need of a savour yealsh i agree with that, but pretty soon you will become one of them in many aspects ( i know you may say you all ready are... but i don’t totally agree with that statement)
I know this information isn’t very handy to you
I’m sure who ever it is that your trying to help but in doing so you say you hate yourself because you just can’t do enough for them.. in my opinion they have to be one of the most selfish most self righteous person I can think of… if they still are annoyed at the fact that ether you don’t pay them enough attention or according to them your slipping away from them.. bloody oth how much more of a selfish act can their be?? ( asides from suicide)
There is one meriv evens!!!!!!!! Not one meriv evens for every single drama one has in their life time.. anywho… I’m sure this would’nt do much.. just try and look after your self a lil..
In all this poem was very gracious in many attributes and aspects of it… it reminded me of star wars actually, you know the whole good side and dark side of the forceJ
Their were ups and downs.. a good achievement if you ask me
Keep a smile on ok? ..: dookuson
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Awwww, that was so gorgeous Meri...and sad too. I hope everything is ok!!!! You are such a special friend (In a good way) and I don't know what I would have done without you for the last two years...going onto a 3rd!!! Luv ya girl!
Luv Meelz
xoxo
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I love you bub
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ahhhhhhhhh. omg.. this poem is sad but it shows that you really cared for that person. i have felt like that before so i can relate to that. i really liked the candle part it was very moving and it was real. that was my favorite part. i love this poem never stop writing.
wishuwereirish -
awwhhh... this is so very sad, but i know exactly what its like! its so true and i love the part You're the candle which lights my path
When all lights have gone out.
But this morning I fell over myself
Because I couldn't find my way.
it was really awesome, this was a great write. i have a few corrections though "To anyway, including you." <-- i think it should be "anyone" maybe? and "I love you will all my heart"
will should be "with" kaythanksbye
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