B old and bright, I arch my wings, ready to take on flight,
U pon the ground are my friends, urging me to fly into the night,
T actfully I bow my head, and the best start its supplying,
T aking the pain of the wind against my wings, I realise I am flying,
E nduring pain of hard and heavy storms yet I still feel utter delight,
R ambling around the icy air, I still can't give up the excite,
F ailing to carry on flying, I decide I must finally give in,
L ying on the sodden grass I feel sad, but still happy within,
Y earning for breath, I collapse on the leaves below me but happy to try again
Author notes
I chose to do an acrostic about a butterfly learning to fly! 
Written December 27th, 2005
A contest entry
- Learn Three New Forms Contest for ages 12 and Under ONLY by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended January 12, 2006, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wow! This was INCREDIBLE!!! Thank you so much for entering! Best of luck with the contest!
Wade -
Thank you so much for the lovley comment
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This is stunning! I too nearly forgot this was an acrostic as I was reading it. Your imagery was beautiful, I could see the butterfly unvealing... and the touch of subtle rhyming was superb. Excellent!
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lol, thank you very much for the comment
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wow, i am speechless! this is an amazingly beautiful write. love the use of your words, i almost feel sorry for the poor little butterfly ha. I will definetly look forward to reading some more of your work!
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Aww, this was cute. Very cool how you took the perspective of a butterfly into life.
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Its not the first acrostic I've done i think its the 2nd or 3rd Thank you very much for the comment
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This is very good! Is this the first acrostic you've done? If so, I am awed. You're very good and you'll only get better with practice. Good luck in the contest!
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Thank yuo very much It wasnt meant to compare the flying to riding a bike but im glad it compares to something different too
lol
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You did an excellent job with this acrostic! Such a vivid image of the butterfly starting to use his wings with the encouragement of his friends. It seems to me you've compared the effort of flying to learning how to first ride your bike. Great job!!! Good luck in your contest!
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thank you very much
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lol thank u hunni
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Hey now! You did a really great job on this. I almost forgot it was an acrostic (which makes it a good one!). Very well done imagery to this one. Bravo!
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Well done babes, you do these so well, do you know that? I can't say I have tried many of these, but you make them inspirational.
Good luck
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