(open in seperate window for audio accompanyment: www.dump.com/cfrs/romantic-piano )
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Take me away piper
To lands only the mind
Can create, playing
Across great fields
Swimming across canals
Adventuring to rescue
Lost imaginations
Stuffed inside
pre-packaged
Radio and corporate creations
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To speak to the soul
Is to sway the heart
And once the heart
Starts to move
Dancing alongside the notes
The soul follows
Rhythmically entranced
seduce the mind and soul
earn the temple's jewels
Author notes
Written December 27th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- art by g r e y i s m.
400 points, ended January 5, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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the setup is 2 poems in one. clever. cuz here i was htinking this is way long for a short poem
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a two in one deal..marvelous together. equally good apart
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nice blue lightning
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Spiritual and moving. Like the winds through your hair at dusk, as waves crash against the shores in anticipation of cleansing breaks. Very smooth and profound. This I do love.
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you've done it again. Although, I think I glimpsed this earlier and didn't comment. you had blue lightening...I think I liked that better. may have been a stronger effect than some flimsy flowers
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well if you're a radio, can you pick up digital satellite?
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thank you, rhymes, I'm glad you liked both aspects of this. both turns of coins. thank you for reading!
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lol go figure indeed!
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I think I like this one better than the other entry. though I liked the music on the other more. haha. go figure. but they're both nice anyway.
thanks for entering,
Lea -
As Congreve said 'Music hath charms to soothe the savage breast, To soften rocks, or bend a knotted oak.'
Personally I find the Pibroch in the hands of a good piper has a more martial power and it was in fact originally used in the fields of Scotland to rouse the savage breast in times of war.
Your poem is however an accurate description of how music can capture the imagination (soul) and lead one to so many different places. Even the commercialy orientated jingles abounding as muzak has some of this power.
Your second section also lays deserved stress on the role of music in amour. Most couples have a favourite tune and 'dance' to the music of the heart.
And of course music is one of the fine arts!
Good write. Good Luck
Jim S
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I am sure I am interpreting this wrong (have not had coffee yet), but I am seeing music and dance ...I am a radio now
that sends that music to distant places<----I think it was the picture that made me see a radio and its wiring. Anyway, very enjoyable and I liked that you did not explain the write. Much luck in the contest,
reenie
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