Walking out the door, only looking at the floor
breaking the words you said down in my head
waiting to take another breath again, but you stay in my head
as i turn i see you and know that your smile will always make me go wild
so im leaving now without knowing if our love was like the eternal fire.
Author notes
Written December 27th, 2005
A contest entry
- 5 line emotions by shimmer.
300 points, ended December 28, 2005, 19 entries
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There's a lot of poems in this contest, veering on to the subject of parting as such. In this case, I feel is a soon to be built relationship. Nice word choice!
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This is a nice write. I know that there are times in my life I can relate to this. Wondering *if*. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.
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Very nicely done. Sometimes we have to walk out to keep from being hurt. ~Jim
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Great!
tash....its so cute
i know who its about....nah nah nah nah nah nah......its really good....it shows what it feels like when that person turns you down and it hurts but in the end you know you both can still be good friends....
keep up the writing
<3Katey
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