Crying willow, shadows show
Where to be and where to go
Spin a deadly web of lies
Bleed it out, no more alibi’s
Told how to think and how to be
The higher up, the mourning of she
Swallow it whole, judge me now
You don’t know so don’t guess how
Superficial beauty bound in fear
Can’t have it all, can’t have me here
Say I’m wrong, say you’re done
The battle’s fought, your conscience won
Shed no tears, but cry ever more
Live alone the devil’s whore
Your mask dies as the truth is said
Voices rage inside your head
Scream, it’s over, cry, its’ done
Hear the laughter? It was all in fun
And tears echo no more pain
Crying blood was all in vain
Burnt at the stake you love the fire
The devil’s whore, and heaven’s liar
A contest entry
- Anything Contest by tears.of.silence.
300 points, ended March 30, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - well....im not sure. by xrain dancerx.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites :) Yes, as many as you like, but hell this wont be simple. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended November 3, 1091 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
What did you think
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Oh wow! I absolutely Love this!!!
wonderfully written!
great..I dont know the right word for it..mauybe i'll call it imagery for now!
It gave me chills and..just..wow.
It was enthralling, breath taking, and exceptionaly beautiful!
Maybe you would like to Collaberate with me on a poem!
You and I. I think we could come up with something wonderful!
Just a thought there.
Anyways,
fantastic write,
keep it up, no doubt!
Yours,
Savi -
Line 4 and Line 18 sorta dont follow the set rhythm of the poem, maybe removing "more" from line 4 and changing "It was" to "'Twas" would make the poem flow
Other than that I have no qualms, an amazing piece of poetry and the last line was very original, "The Devil's Whore, and Heaven's Liar" it's such a beautiful and dark contrast of how this person is portrayed.
Good luck in the contest.
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I LOVE IT! the rhymes r awesome and the ending...i dont even know a word that would say how much i loved it. lolz. so if u havent guessed i loved ur poem.
great job and good luck! thank u for entering.
tay.
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Thank you so much for entering my contest. I appreciate the entry.. Very different but I like that. The name really ws like wow.! Great job please keep up the great work. Best of luck to you. kahy
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i really like this one.it's deep.makes you think.
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