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He Journeyed with his Brilliance Long

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He journeyed, defeated, mournful, slow, the sunset smoldering in blazing reds

and died another darkened day in the flames of a crimson celestial bed.

 

To escape his brilliance is what he sought, brought down by love that blindly bled

and streamed against his ebbing heart, with an unrequited love, near death.

 

 

The mountains neared, on high they leaped, like flames above a burning pyre

the shades of eve were mocking him, his mind could not escape their fire.

 

His brilliance came, his brilliance passed unanswered through love’s iron gate and fell athwart the sun that set and sealed his impassioned loveless fate.

 

~*~

 

O Brilliance! Forever useless, thee! in fields of burning, blind desires-

ten thousand minds would fail us there where one pure loving heart's required!

 

He journeys on to cast his brilliance from the highest craggy peak

and as he reached the foothills, he heard a siren’s blood-filled, dreaded shriek...

 

 

He saw her beauty, chained and captured; bound, imprisoned, tortured, beat

by loveless beasts that dwel;ed below the dirty, pitiless city streets.

 

As he reached her wingèd form, like Æsop’s fable in radiant splendor

his brilliance gave way to his heart which unto her eyes so readily surrendered.

 

~*~

 

Captured thus, he set her free; she flew with freedom, as a swan

his deed was done, and he’d begun to wonder if her love was won.

 

His brilliance sighed, he knew too well the hopelessness of his cause

as he watched her circle high, he noticed there a slightest pause...

 

 

Against the moon in radiant clouds, the whitening of a sudden dawn

arose against the flight of birds and against the foam-tipped sea she saw

 

his feelings pure, his heart ring true, and from the depths his love she drew

she found true love, then beckoned him; they spread their wings, and on they flew.

 

 

 

 

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a story about the futility of brilliance in the realm of love...


Written December 26th, 2005

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  • kryspin
    December 27, 2005
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    how elegant


  • StoneLion
    December 27, 2005
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    As always you amaze me. I think the ending is my favorite part just because it ends so neatly. The reader is left just going "Wow." In my opinion, this piece reads like it should be in a book, something that should be expanded and worked into a larger piece. Just my two cents.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    December 27, 2005
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    Oh I love this brother. Brains have no place in the heart that is for sure....evident by all the times I didn't use mine where the matters of love were concerned Wonderful story. I'm bookmarking this one. Good luck in the contest.

    ~Lyrical


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    December 26, 2005
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    Awesome beautifully scripted... Kudos!! Two

    Amazing Magnificently flowing truly a work of art here you are captivating and your imagery is astounding ... truly an awesome piece a pure delight to read Santa must have been sooooo good to you Your muse is honed to brilliance Kudos!! Well done!! Brava!! Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors


  • December 26, 2005
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    Yes indeed my brother, sounds more than that! lol... ahhh the motorcycle seat...( imaginations working overtime!) hehehehehe


  • wbiro gold member
    December 26, 2005
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    thanks, you are so supportive, like a motorcycle seat, sis! (hmmm... did that sound endearing?)


  • December 26, 2005
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    Simply fantastic!

    This is written so well that it surely amazes me, the words the story and most of all because it it will a great message of hope that at the end and they found themselves as one!
    So fantastic dear brother, and I love it!
    Good work as always!


  • Night Hope gold member
    December 26, 2005
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    '...Captured thus, he set her free; she flew with freedom, as a swan his deed was done, and he’d begun to wonder if her love was won. His brilliance sighed, he knew too well the hopelessness of his cause as he watched her circle high, he then noticed the slightest pause...' Lovely storytelling, Wayne...I liked the alliteration, too...even if ya did use the word 'crimson'... Using the image of a swan was a wise move on your part, as well...I know you know this... Thanks for entering, my Friend...& good luck... Wanda
    Edited on Dec 26, 2:42 p.m. because 'just too too many too's!!! '.

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