if i cut myself wide open, love
would thou crawl inside to save my soul?
would thou share the burden of my sins
letting darker passions take control?
if i descend from grace, my love
would thou catch me as i fell?
would thou grasp me in thy mortal arms
and free fall into hell?
if i embraced the dark, my love
would thou leave the light behind?
would thou espouse profanity
and adore my twisted mind?
to truly love, my love
does one serve or show the way?
and if thou lovest true, my love,
does it matter where we play?
Author notes
Written December 26th, 2005
A contest entry
- Let Me Die Still Loving by Babyruth714.
700 points, ended June 12, 2006, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me something of substance! by Lugh.
450 points, ended February 27, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - depression or dark love by Darkened eyes.
370 points, ended May 24, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Return of The Love Goths by Rockstar Bob.
800 points, ended July 10, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love by Mrs-Gollihue.
600 points, ended August 25, 2007, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Don't go to the light, when you can have more fun in the Dark! by luna-midnight.
875 points, ended November 19, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Romantic Poetry * picture inspired by ennovy.
700 points, ended June 27, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A love That Surpasses All. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended September 15, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DARK EROTICA.........CHECK IT OUT.............ADULT by WillAlwaysLove.
1200 points, ended December 22, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Beautiful wording, great write. Different than most I have read lately, nice flow. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Very nicely done, thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Novy & Brazos -
Dark sweet love, wonderfully metaphoric...thank you for entering....novy & Brazos
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I'm sorry but I must DQ you . . . because even though this is a great poem, it was not what I was looking for
best of luck
- Page
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this has an excellent flow, love your choice of words, and the poem itself was wicked =]!
i love how you twisted love and darkness into this piece it was was truly masterful!
great job!
thanks for your entry and good luck
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Very Good
I really enjoyed reading this poem. You did it justice. And everything you have said about true love..I agree with. Thank you for sharing this poem with me and entering my contest.
Keep up the good work and best of luck.
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This is a great poem and rlly well written with great rhythm and the emotion is shown really well.
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Darkened eyes
Thank you so much!
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This was such an amazing poem, but you obviously didn't read my rules thoroughly. I asked for freeverse only, so I have to DQ you. Good luck in the future; you are very talented.
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This is a wondeerful write indeed. Good luck in the contest.
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amazing. simply amazing. it's so beautiful and the picture is a great complement.
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bravo!!!finally, this is what I was looking for, so dark yet beautiful, great use of vocabulary, the contrast od dark and light was exquisite, a wonderful poem, you're at the top so far...
Ruth
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unique to say the least.
Thank you so much for sharing
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aslanlight, thank you for your thoughtful comments. Yes it was an exploration of human love ...which I believe is a spiritual phenomenon.
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Awesome! I was searching for more spiritual meaning in your other poems because I found some in your contest poems and was wondering how deeply you meant it. You seem to be meaning human love although you speak of it in a highly spiritual manner.
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loveless wrists, thank you for your kind words, they meant a lot to me.
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i love this -- it flows excellently and has a wonderful darkness of love yet not depressing. very good!
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Tears of ice, thanks for your words of inspiration!
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excellent
alright then. i have absolutly no chance in the contest of getting first! you so deserve it more!!!wonderful write and i wish you best of luck in the contest! -
Splenda Enhanced, thanks so much!
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Youallareposers, thank you so much for your encouragement...thanks for reading!
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Another amazing write, wow, I don't really know what to say...
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this is really good....it sounds like it should be ina book somewhere...
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Crimson Spyder, thanks so much!
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OOOh, I really like this poem..
-Crimson-
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