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Psychobabble

When it seems fate's out to get you
And a thousand ills beset you,
And your joie-de-vivre has hit a slump...
Give all facile consolation
A two-fingered salutation,
Tell sweetness and light to take a jump!

When they tell you you're obsessive
Introspective and depressive,
And of mental health you show no trace...
Tell them their psychologizing
Needs a radical revising!
Kick the bastards in their tenderest place!

Let your mind be marked 'No entry!'
To all therapeutic gentry,
Send them on their way with gesture rude!
For their interactive babble
Simply is a game of Scrabble
Where each tile's a flaccid platitude!

So...
If one day when you're out walking
You can sense a stranger stalking,
Then, my friend, remember, if you please:
This need not be a delusion!
Life has proved, beyond confusion,
"Even paranoids have enemies!"

Author notes

I am sorry that you are feeling "down". In such circumstances, however, I feel that "inspirational" writing is of no help (or perhaps what I mean by that term differs from your understanding of it!) In any case - this perhaps may make you laugh a little!


Incidentally, this song was written as a cabaret piece for the pre-Congress party of the International Association of Jungians, when they met in Cambridge a few years' back... I now use it (with their permission) in various live presentations, but have not recorded it - yet!

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  • ourgirlFriday
    October 26
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    very much my mood yesterday...I feel as though someone must've been watching me!


  • CatInTheShadows
    October 3
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    Interesting poem. I particularly liked the last two lines. Good luck in my contest!


  • Aspirin Lullaby
    June 20

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    i dont think that it was properly added to my contest, as it isn't showing up. Hmmm... might look into that.


  • Mountainwhispers
    September 7, 2008
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    This was intresting thanks for entering!


  • marciakay81
    July 29, 2008
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    interesting. i enjoyed this write. thanks.


  • toomysterious
    July 24, 2008
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    Excellent comedy and satire on such a serious subject, as they say laughter is the best medicine.


  • Sorath
    July 24, 2008

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    Wow thank you for the entry. By the first paragraph & last paragraph, correct me if I'm wrong, I understand you are talking about paranoia. Your rhyming was so subtle it was only until the 2nd time I read it out loud I realized.
    Let your mind be marked 'No entry!'
    To all therapeutic gentry
    I loved that line so much & it made me laugh out loud which is amazing for me at a time like this.

    Thank you so much for this entry! It hit close to my heart in a humorous way & made me feel not as numb!

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    Thank you for your profoundly spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Lotus-Mama
    May 30, 2008

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    This is wonderful! The flow and rhyme are superb! The truth and humor compliment eachother perfectly. This is a work of art! Beautiful!! Standing Ovation!!!


  • Sanguinarius
    May 29, 2008
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    BRAVO!!! Excellent work here , comedic yet so very true! ~Bret~


  • Spiritual Nature
    January 27, 2008

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    This is a very comedic take on the struggles of mental health. I think it is hysterical. Good job. Blessings, Doris


  • adios muchachos gold member
    March 1, 2006
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    While reading this I could not but go into a song mode. What is more, I imagined this being sung in a musical/comedy play, of which I dearly love.
    Very uplifting little ditty!
    Hope all is well your side.

    John

    • Vera Rich gold member
      November 17, 2006
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      I have just found your comment on my "Psychobabble" - sorry I missed it at the time (1 March), but I had had my radical mastectomy/lymphectomy two days previously, and was still connected to various drips and drains and so had no access to the Web...

      But I wanted, even at this late date, to thank you, and say: yes, it is, indeed, a song, and was writen as a cabaret piece for the pre-Congress party of the International Association of Jungians, when they met in Cambridge a few years' back...


  • chills gold member
    March 1, 2006
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    Just had to have another look at this - yes, I still love it! x chilli


  • Quill
    March 1, 2006
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    yeah i liked this write, the title drew me in ,all the clinical stuff they merely repeat stuff they learnt in some uni somewhere, take no notice ! a good write.

  • Philogos gold member
    March 1, 2006
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    This works really well. The consistency of the structure is great and the content is a very amusing treatment of a serious topic. Hypochondriacs get ill too. I believe that you can still make some small changes to improve the rhythm. I think that you could usefully come back to this one in a month or two and do a final polish when it has set.
    Edited on Mar 01, 2:11 because ''.

    • Vera Rich gold member
      November 17, 2006
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      i have just found your comment of 1 March... (Yes, I know that was nearly 9 months ago, but I missed it at the time, as I had a radical mastectomy/lymphectomy two days previously, and had no access to the Web while in hospital..

      I appreciate what you say... but it would not be really practical to give this poem a "final polish when it has set" -since it was commissioned as as a cabaret "turn" for the opening party of the Congress of the International Association of Jungians back in, I think 2002 or 2003, and is now, presumably, enshrined somewhere in their archives...

      • Philogos gold member
        November 17, 2006
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        Hello Vera, Thank you very much for your reply to my very old comment. That seems a long time ago now and it was written before I understood your way of interacting with AllPoetry. My comment reads as being rather presumptious now that I know more about you and also irrelevant for a performance piece.

        We haven't been in touch for some time and I hope that you are well. Have you finally put the book to bed?

        With best regards,

        vic


  • chills gold member
    February 11, 2006
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    This gave me such a broad smile!! Particularly the last line...
    Edited on Mar 01, 3:07 because ''.


  • Phoenix Karkadann
    December 26, 2005
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    lol! okay I totally understand this poem, and yes it was cheering aswell! well written, thanks for entering and goodluck..

    Melpomene

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