kisses
spotlights
have you already forgotten
golden
bloodshed
whispers in the foreground
the blanks you filled
your absent mind
then my last breath
and then you died
your hand i mine
anger tight
forgetting time
vintage night
sixteen eyes
of different kinds
staring at forgotten sights
memories of better times sinking deep into my mind
memories of better times sinking deep into my mind
the shadow's vines
keeping score
rolled back feelings beg for more
the twisted path
the one i follow
lost inside my black tomorrow
all i need
all you gave me
fuck your words
they couldn't save me
forget
offset
basking in your sick regret
anger anger beating down beating down on hollow ground
anger anger beating down beating down on hollow ground
black widow luck
on which we dine
spotless blades with perfect shine
poison poison so unreal making sure my wounds don't heal
poison poison so unreal making sure my wounds don't heal
my wounds don't heal
they'll never heal
your making sure my wounds don't heal
Author notes
this is for paint this town red, merry christmas!
i realy put a lot into this poem and its by far the best that i've wrote in ages so i hope you like it! now i'm real sleepy so i'm going to wach donnie darko!
Written December 25th, 2005
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tehe...this is...awesome, Raven...awesome X 10 sooo..um..yeah...
tehe...
ttyl
~steph~......< your lesbian lover you never knew about O.O...j.k
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whoa i dont think i've told you how great this is
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ohhhh darling...
is this the poem you told me to read a week ago?
i'm sorry sweetheart.
it's gorgeous, as well as your face. ;D
i'm mad i didn't read it when you told me to. I swear, it's fantastic.
i love your page except the emo song.
heart emo. emoboys. me /being/ and emokid... maybeee... i don't know that's just what people label me.
but it's okayyy. better to be yourself than be loved by all, hm?
yes.
well i CAN'T wait to see you tomorrow, and if we have a snowday you're coming over so i can see you and smell the scent of Gerard on your sweatshirt.
=)
weeee....
love,
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aww hunnie this was great i love your poems i think ill turn this one into a song to ill get my band together,i hope you come back from colorado soon ill miss ,and i love you more
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wow
this is amazing
Raven, i never thought that words could be so cleverly put together. i really love this. i couldnt believe you wrote this (not that i underestimate you) but, God, Raven, this is just so mind blowing!!! i love it... JESUS... if this is one of those Donny Darko has the answers things... i MUST see that movie... i need to go try to write something half as amazing as this...
this is just so amazing
this poem has all the answers... lemme tell you...
wow...
::walks away... poem in hand... confused and totally amazed... shaking head saying... thats just so amazing... holy dear good god...::
i love you
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<3!!!! It would make a good song. I really like the end and the repetative lines. LURVE YOU!
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wow this could be a kick ass song, we are sooooo forming a band together
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yea um bout the title...it was just the first thing that came to mind cuz my dad was getting take aways and he called the house and told us he forgot his umbrella and his girlfriend heather told him that boys don't use umbrellas...so yea.
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yay a poem for me waheeeeeeeee!!!! yeah this is really good, it just kinda rolls off your tongue when you read it and is quick paced.. i like it a lot! it's very kool.. hope your computer starts to work and gets the chip thang it needs so you can write some more great writes cheers
x
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HELL YES!! why do i feel as if you've been away for some LONG long time???
don't you love how lyrics.. like when you write them down... if you got some enlgish writer then they'd say: hey that grammar is wrong.. but then you hear the words.. and it just makes a whole lot of sense and if tyou changed it.. it wouldn't mean the same at all. i love that about lyrics, for me they give me freedom to be some one else other than what my poetry is.. i don't know. I've always thought that when i write songs it is always more honest than what i say in my poems. but shhh dont tell anyone that lol. umm yeah i'mbabling sorry. i jsut think that this was awesome. and i'm not just saying that cos ur a fav, but yeah. liek honestly, ir eally like it, i felt rhythm to it its great, awesome, write another one muaha 
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indeed, the best ive read in a long while. my hat comes off to you. it reminded me of war in the beginning but in the end im not sure. this is fucking great raven. have a lovely day
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i do like this poem a lot and i think it would be a great song or if your a singer a great performance piece you could sing but i don't understan the title with the poem
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thanx so much!how have u been?
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niiiiiiiiiiice.
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this was excellent great write
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