Come with me,
to a place far, far away,
where nothing matters and no one cares,
oh won't you come with me?
Come with me to a place far, far away,
where you'll be free and at peace,
won't you please come?
Come with me to a place,
where I can be you and you can be me,
oh how much fun that would be,
Come with me to a place far, far away,
where nothing could ever fuck up your day,
come with me and you will see,
a place where you can be completely free,
Come with me and you'll be cool,
come with me it'll be awesome!
come with me and you you will find,
yourself, doing for someone else what i'm doing within time.
Author notes
This is about growing up and doing drugs and how people show younger people and so on. It repeats.
Written December 24th, 2005
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Wow I would love to visit this place my friend truly a beautiful write.
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a place to be free, nice. then i read your comment about it. drugs to get there isn't a good thing. the poem was so beautifully written. All I could think about while reading it was a feeling of bliss and place to be free, something i want. nicely done.
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This is truly a great write I love the picture it portrays.
Great poem my friend sorry about the short comment just at work. -
This was great. I loved the fiest three lines of this, it was really powerful and really hit me hard. Oh, how much would I like to be free free. This was a really hopeful poem. I love it!
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hmmm... i really like the beguinning. the end was not as stong as i thought it would have been though. i really like this though. it is very unique, and i like how the pattern changed it the poem how you went from stanza's to couplets...very different. love it.
Merry Christmas,
Blind Lover -
Very Good!
Hey, I really like this. It's pretty interesting. I like the repetition. I think this would make a pretty good song, so if you're a vocalist, pianist, guitarist, or anything with an instrument, try to write some music to it! I bet it'd be pretty good. Put it in the Featured box or something, maybe more people will come read it. It should be read more, that's my opinion. Good job!
Take Care,
Jasmine
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WOW!! This poem was really really cool!!
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nice
i cans see friendship oreitned and relationship-ented 2. i had to reread to c the drug part... yea. i like it. -
Hmm interesting writee. It made me think about hanging out with my friends, so it made me smile. Great write!
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wow.i loved it.kinda made me smile and think about stuff i did a few years ago.great write.
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