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"I see you cry..."

I see you cry.
I see you fade away.
I see your pain.
I see it everyday.

I try and help.
I try I swear.
I try so hard.
I try to care.

I can't move.
I can't sleep.
I can't work.
I can't weep.

I can scream.
I can yell.
I can win.
I can fail.

But I have to say it.
But I have to speak.
But I have to hide,
or should I seek?

Let me please.
Let me say.
Let me please.
I love you everyday.

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Written March 15th, 2005

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  • San-d
    March 10, 2006
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    In the second to last stanza "speak and freak". Although I find it rhymes well, I just don't feel that the word "freak" fits in with the rest of the wording in this poem. I don't know maybe it is just me, but just seems too much of a slang word for this pen. Otherwise I think this is a great write....
    Smiles your way >>> Sandy San-d


  • Poetic-Goddess
    December 26, 2005
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    Hmm I'm not really sure what to say I'm at lost for words and that never really happens to me but I did enjoy this it was well writein!!!Best of luck!!


  • crivanea silver member
    December 24, 2005
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    wow..even though this is very repetative..and the second to last stanza have a bad ryhme.." speak and freak"...sound kinda force..but i really enjoy the message of this poem..somehow it still touches the heart..because u clearly wrote the differences between what a person can do..will do..and won't do..nicely done..good job