(open in a seperate window for accompanying audio: www.dump.com/aokq/haste-the-day---epitaph)
In the search for ultimate beauty
The bottom dollar dropped
Within the confined shiny
Prism crystals, the true
Light shined in glorious brilliance
And for just one moment
We forgot who we are
Recalling of a time
When we were
certain we knew
Who we were
Author notes
Written December 23rd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- art by g r e y i s m.
400 points, ended January 5, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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what do you have to be jealous of?
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thanks dis B ac Tiz Up, (hard name to type, shoulda just copied). glad you enjoyed the journey
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fantasmic..I'm jealous
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beauty in its true form does remind us that at one point in time we knew who we were but the present moment is never as certain as it was then...
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I made another minor edit in the second stanza. I just changed some verb tenses around on the 'forgot who we were' switched it to 'forgot who we are' and ended with 'and remembered who we were'
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I hope you win
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corrected. wonder why my spell check didnt catch that
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I really like the accompanying audio.
I like the poem too but I thought I would point out a typo:
shinned should be shined.
thanks for your entry and best of wishes,
Lea
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this was a frekin awesome read, i love your stuff, this is a get read. i have no clue who i am. however finding out is going to be a blast. i don't worry about either who i was are who i am, okay downright lie, i am allowed one per day, damnit and i just used it. i could have used it, noooooooooo. well keep it flowing and sheck ya later
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i get to be the first to comment! kick ass! this is amazing. such art my dear. love the background and the text is marvelous. conversations do kill! also a kick ass STP song!
great imagery here. people worry too much about what they were and not enough about what they are
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