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Died of cancer - aged 30

 




He died a hero!

Brave, without bravado;
He spat in death's face
as it took him.
And if he lived and died 
   for nothing
Then the world gave him 
   nothing
to live and die for.

 

And, after all,
when the heroic dead are counted,
Unnumbered enemies,
at last laid side by side:
Can any claim it really 
                mattered
What it was they fought for 
                when they died?


Author notes

This poem was written for a friend who died just as he was ready to live.
Written December 23rd, 2005

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  • shubs
    July 9, 2006
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    A socker punch of a poem which literally spits out the real words with panache and yet has a main protag to its tale and this is the emotion that seeps in me the reader..a strong muse if there was one Shubs

  • zara
    December 29, 2005
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    Your very interesting comment brought me back to read more of your work. (Thank you)

    This is a real gem of a poem, the ideas expressed in the most concise imaginable language. Excellent.

    I will echo Zayra's comment about spacing, though somewhat differently. It is my own aesthtic quirk that I like space before and after the poem, while AP tends to cram things together. I usually give four or five spaces; it makes the poem stand out distinctly from the other "junk" on the page. But that's just visual aesthetics, nothing to do with the poem itself . . .

    . . . which is a very good poem.


  • December 27, 2005
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    very sad and very bold. Who was he? I lost a great friend to cancer and it effected me greatly. I agree with Harlequin, it was truely heart felt as is all your poetry.

  • Harlequin
    December 27, 2005
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    A very truely and heartfelt write my friend, may he rest in peace. A lovely tribute.... Jeff

  • Philogos gold member
    December 26, 2005
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    Thank you Zayra. I made the change you suggested and it is a huge improvement, separating the first line and improving the contrast with what follows. Thanks again.


  • Heart Sutra
    December 26, 2005
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    This is a really strong poem. It would be stronger in my opinion if you would space it out just a bit. Maybe the first line could stand on its own and then begin the next stanza, for example. It is really good, I just see that it needs a little breathing room in between stanzas.

  • Ir.muse
    December 26, 2005
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    oh!This is really a very sad poem.
    May he rest in peace.
    Shahrzad


  • chills gold member
    December 23, 2005
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    Crying

    Vic this is very terrible. We all have a 'big C' story to relate - mine is of my dad. Posted a poem yesterday about a family friend who died of advanced prostate cancer. Think that allpoetry is a good way to mourn and chuck out all the sadness and anger. You write it, it goes off into the ether and you are relieved. Well, that's how I feel anyhow. Big crimbly love, Dibs (no not typo - just your accent!!!)

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