God you are my Savior
You have helped me out in life
It has been so hard on me
All my days filled with strife
Yet you seem to always be here
To see me on my way
And to help my life get better
Each end every day
And although at times I don't see
How things could end up so great
I always have to remember
How you chose my fate
And now that you have helped me out
I am willing to do the same
If someone asks how it happened
"God is responsible for who I became"
Author notes
Written December 23rd, 2005
A contest entry
- Dear God by cookie crumbs.
300 points, ended December 29, 2005, 18 entries
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Wonderful!! I hate poems when people HAVE to TRY to ryme and it doesnt sound right, but you rymed and it souded wonderful.
Keep it up and good luck!!
~Brooke -
I really like the way you used the rhyming pattern you used. It was really good because it wasn't all about the rhyme, but it added to it so much. I also love those last two lines, 'If someone asks how it happened "God is responsible for who I became." Thanks!
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