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Blood Curl

Tears laced with cyanide
Red lace bows spun though her raven hair
Smile stained with crimson
None but her unrequited lover’s blood
Her eyes are dark and mournful
Because she was never loved
She is now immortal
Blessed with the fire from inside
She held on for so long
The pain crawling deep inside
And though she tried to remain happy
She knew inside she had died.

Author notes

I crafted this little gem in only a few minuets...I likes it pretty well...
Written November 29th, 2005

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  • AngelinBlack
    February 9, 2006
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    Awesome poem. I love the imagery and the story it tells. I love how it was told in third person instead of the usual first person. You are very talented. Keep up the good works!


  • Without-A-Reason
    December 22, 2005
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    awesome

    this is a really awesome poem well done and lots of emotion great write
    X.x.Amber.x.X


  • suicideRain
    December 22, 2005
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    It's really cool! Are you saying she's a vampire? very awsome write keep up the good writting/work-ish type thing... ^_^.
    later.


  • I Am The Nightmare
    December 22, 2005
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    aww

    Wow this is really good i love it keep up the great work!
    X_Tattered and Torn_X