Darkness consumes me, It burns me inside.
Along with the feelings I've tried to hide.
Wriggling and writhing alone in the night.
I cry for my soul, which sees no trace of light.
Through pain and loneliness, I've become such a mess.
Just lying here, lonely in my wedding dress.
Author notes
Please don't be too critical...I'm sesitive.
Written December 22nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Contest For Beginners by Lady Altheia.
300 points, ended June 11, 2006, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Me too.....I just don't get around to it very often.
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This was an awesome piece of work my friend I am just sad that you don't write more often.
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I agree, inspiration isn't a button you turn on and off. I thought this poem was well written. It has a bit of a twist. Usually one isn't lonely just before she gets married. Good luck in the contest.
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nice rymthing( I cant spell that word for some strange reason) I like it...i hate writing for class, she assigns stupid topics and wants them to inspire me. Inspiration is not a button one can turn on and off...
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Hmm, kinda a downer, but I like it. It kinda reminds me of Kill Bill, I dunno if that was on perpose or not...
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no consistancy in the number of beats, that would be my only complaint. Poor sad lady. Um... left carrot three?
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