i could have reached out and flicked the radio off
but it was a part off this whole thing
it wasn't even on a station
just static
but that just made fit even more so
the neon lights shining through the window
they're part of it as well
and the darkness
it's just perfect
because the light makes things so fake
a hopeless world of imitation
and much more than i take
stains on the sheets
unbearable heat
it makes so much fucking sense
i mean what's the point of denial?
lying to yourself?
idiotic i think
there's blood in the bathroom sink
and boots on the floor
they're not mine
but i've seen them before
or maybe i dreamed it
it's hard to tell
there's music from next door now
a screaming gothic-rock
and if i was someone else
i'd likely go and knock
on the door
and ask them to turn it down
but i'm not
i'm me
and it's the sweetest thing i've heard all night
cos' silence cuts through me
like the sharpest knife
ridiculous i know
but silence makes things slow
and i can't stand that
the fucking mediocre boredom
of everyday life
it's louder now
bringing the lyrics to my attention
something about suicide and heartbreak
this makes me laugh
i don't know why
i'm probably crazy
but that's okay
i don't want to be normal
it's better this way
i think i'm hungry
the fridge is fucking empty though
i'll eat some instant noodles
and throw them up later today
crouched over the toilet
with no-one to hold back my hair
i suppose i should get up now
and maybe pick something to wear
i can go to the market
and look through the old records there
and on the way back
i'll get splashed by a car
and i'll smile
and then go on my way...
Author notes
i'd really be quite grateful if you'd comment...
Written December 22nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Best by Chelsea Void.
300 points, ended June 30, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Suicide - make it stop! by reinhardt-napoleon.
750 points, ended May 11, 2007, 36 entries
Honorable mention
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Very well done!!!! so powerfull and wow!! loving it all the way you have great talent!!! I will deffinately read more of your poetry!! I wish you great luck in this contest!!
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This was a very well done poem..the imagery was so powerfull as well as the words they flowed together so well good luck with this contest and keep writing!
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great poem
I thought this poem was good. I thought it showed great imagery and great emotion. It held my interest all the way from the beginning to the end. It was very well written. The emotions I got from reading the poem were those of confusion, helplessness, and a cry for help. great job. -
I really like this.I wish you th best of luck in writing...you have natural talent
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PL CHANGE THE COMBINATION OF COLOURS
I AM UNABLE TO READ THE VERSE AS IT IS BECAUSE OF THE COLOUR COMBINATION CREATING HURDLES -
Hello.
First thank you for this poem.
It is really scary...and great.
I especially love the ending: "and then go on my way..."
oh, just one thing:
"this makes me laugh
i don't [know] why
i'm probably crazy" - you forgot the "know"
but anyway this poem is great!
good luck in my conest (oh, hope it doesn't matter too much that I won't give any applauses now, i will applaude when the contest ended)
Keep on writing - I'm keeping on!
Stop suicide.
Joey
P.S.: The background and the font colour don't really fit together in a good way for the reader...just a thought -
I like this one. I like the lines:
"there's music from next door now
a screaming gothic-rock
and if i was someone else
i'd likely go and knock
on the door
and ask them to turn it down
but i'm not
i'm me
and it's the sweetest thing i've heard all night
cos' silence cuts through me"
These lines make me think of my neighbours next door who play their music sometimes late into the night and into the early morning. Funny enough, it doesn't bother me. I don't care for the sound of silence too much. Silence scares me. For some reason sound of music whether loud or not makes me relax. If anything, when I hear loud music I can actually just sleep through it. Anyway, good write.
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