Somewere in this wrecthed world,
a little child is sitting.
Keeping his mouth very shut
afraid of what will be done
once the words he utters comes out.
This little child is a brave little being,
having a monster for mom and a father not seeing.
but still this child is the future of ours
let us pray he will not use his mom as an
example in this worlds final hours.
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Written December 22nd, 2005
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Wonderful
Very well done. So vivid and detailed.
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this is a good poem, it carry an important message, I like it!!! good job!!!
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I shivered...this poem made me...I didn't like it..I didn't like it at all, it brought back feelings. But It is a great write!!
Rosita -
potential, DEFINITELY.
hmmm. interesting. i think this brings up an extremely valid point and thought provoking topic, yet i think that there could have been more examples used to bring depth and richness to this piece. for instance:
Somewere in this wrecthed world,
a theres a little child sitting.
Keeping lips tight,
afraid of the next repercussion
once the truth of his words come out
And I wonder where he gets the strength,
With a mother thrashing and a father
Locked inside a rather small and inaccurate fantasy
but still this child is the future of ours
let us pray he will not use his mom as an
example in this worlds truth.
i loovvvveee the meaning of this poem the more and more i look at it, so keep it up. pull out the good ole thesaurus and see what you can make happen.
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