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The great escape

My poet-lover proved a rat,
A serpent in the grass;
The bubbles of romance fell flat
In blackest bedroom farce!
I soon decided I must quit;
But to avoid a row
I opted for a moonlight flit -
The question was: Just how?

He hardly leaves the place; just sits
All day and half the night,
Picking his finger-nails to bits,
Considering what to write.
How could I pack my bags and creep
Thus laden from the house?
(Useless to try while he's asleep!
He's sure to wake - the louse!)

So I resorted to deceit.
I cooed: 'Observe the date;
A whole month since we met, my sweet,
It's time to celebrate!
I've brought your favourite malt', I said.
He drank all he could take...
I left him comatose - and fled!
In short - I ' scotched ' the snake!

Author notes


For the sake of readers in the USA (where I understand "malt" has a different meaning),
in the UK, "malt" means a superior type of whisky from Scotland, identifiable to a particular glen or island, and drunk either neat or with the addition of a little (pure) water -
- as opposed to the cheapo blended whisky from the supermarket or convenience store that one uses for cooking, hot toddies, mixed drinks and so forth.


V E R A R I C H

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  • Mr. Kodak
    November 20
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    Second Place

    I loved the way you ended this poem, with a line like that its no wonder how you earned my silver trophy......well done poet

  • Mr. Kodak
    November 17
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    Very nice

    nice ending i loved it all around. its a great way to get rid of someone. i am so glad i found my angel of my dreams and didnt have to resort to doing this to one of my exs.

    Good luck in the contest!!!!


  • Mrs. Kodak gold member
    November 16
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    oooh i love this. It's a very good write. I really enjoyed reading this.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Shydreamer3
    July 27, 2008
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    Ok this will definetly be considered its definetly different and unique from the rest. i liked it


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    July 5, 2008

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    You told a nice story with nice rhyme. The last line was brilliant, no doubt.
    Well done and good luck!


  • Fire-Fly
    June 27, 2008

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    Very good, a funny way to tell the tale of that escape. Really enjoyed reading.

    Well done and good luck in my contest.


  • Mirthryl
    June 24, 2008

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    I can imagine it being a challenge to get away from a poet, or anyone who writes! You never know when they will wake with a thought or inspiration to jot down. And if their word processor or typewriter is near the exit...you're never sure they won't make a dash to it! Thank you for your entry!


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 23, 2008
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    Did Macbeth drink?


  • Jessi-desensytized
    June 8, 2008

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    HAHAHA thats exactly what i meant!!! LOOOOL

    i really liked this one great job!

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!!!


  • FelineMuse
    September 5, 2007
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    Hehe. Nice.


  • Xsafety glassX
    May 11, 2007
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    thanx for entering


  • One Eunique Pixie
    April 9, 2007

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    This poem has a good bit of flow. I really like the idea. Good Luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing. Love and Peace, Charlene.


  • ma belle
    September 26, 2006
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    Congrats on your GOLD, Vera. A truly worthy write and I loved that you scotched the slimy snake. ha! Trust you are feeling better. All my best, Belle


  • intanglio2ring
    September 24, 2006
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    Dear Vera Rich,
    Your reputation preceeds you - and 1st I'd like to say how honored I am to have you in my contest!
    Heartily loving the humor and flow of this piece from the stiff critique I usually see of you!
    Scotch - What a way to go!
    Thanks for an absolutely enjoyable poem & Good Luck in my contest!
    Tang
    (smacks himself for thinking about that one eyed snake!)


  • Andantino gold member
    May 26, 2006
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    Very Macbethian, if there's such a word. I am afraid your allusiveness has probably been lost on most folk. 'scotched' indeed. Thank you, Vera.


  • Sandygram
    May 26, 2006
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    WONDERFUL POEM

    Oh I liked this poem. It gave me a chuckle. I like the imagery you showed with your word choices. Rhyme was great too. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy

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