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She Now Finds Light Not of the Sun

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

A Farewell Villanelle for VinillaLace




Lost in time, submerged by love
engulfed in endless, unpitiable darkness
she now finds light not of the sun.

 


Reaching out, her hands found none 
she drew them in to endless sadness
lost in time, submerged by love.

 


She had tried, sent out her love
it just brought on her utter madness
she now finds light not of the sun.

 


Carried away on heartbreak doves
with all whose love they did profess
lost in time, submerged by love.

 


Win all her love? no one has done,
though they have tried, without success;
she now finds light not of the sun.

 


and though it's true she once had fun,
it weighed too heavily upon her chest;
lost in time, submerged by love,
she now finds light not of the sun.

 

 

 



 

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Good bye, vini



Note- the 'light not of the sun'- Religion.
Written December 21st, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thanks, Cheryl


  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thanks, Grossmutti, for the comment and for the hopes for the best for my departed friend...

  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thank you princess for the lovely comment...!

  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thanks, breeze, glad the poem touched you...!

  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thanks, dark...


  • whispersoftly
    December 22, 2005
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    Mr Wbiro this is a sad heartfelt write, maybe she will find happiness then come back and incorporate AP as part of that! nothing to say she can never comeback, this write is beautiful and set out wonderfully set out the back ground adds to it like the sun setting! well done my dear brother xx C

  • crimsonPRINCESS
    December 22, 2005
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    magestic.

    it's like a flower that bloomed so beautifully and the whole nature cries along with it.

    very endearing.


  • LovesWithTheBreeze
    December 22, 2005
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    I dont know the story here, but I really loved the write. It was beautiful and I just enjoyed reading it. Very well done. Hope whoever is departing will find their way back

  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    thanks, Grossmutti, for your comment!


  • dark-idle-pixie
    December 22, 2005
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    a happy parting perhaps


  • nichtmich silver member
    December 22, 2005
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    Sad & Lovely

    So sad and heartfelt. You are a very sympathetic friend to this person, I'm glad she has found another kind of happiness and hope for only the best. Thank you for sharing, this is beautiful.


  • wbiro gold member
    December 22, 2005
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    Well, actually you were partially right, Duana, for the 'submerged in love' is her being so full of love and not having been able to share it... and your eyes played a trick on you in the line 'she now finds love not of the sun'... for it is 'light' not of the sun! So I see your interpretation now!


  • duana
    December 22, 2005
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    wow- I sure read your poem wrong. I read submerged in love, as lost, not found...and 'she now finds love not of sun' as the light in her life turning dark.....amazing how a poem could be interpreted the opposite the author intended. I would have to take your poem line by line to show you how I came up with that interpretation. It would never occured to me this was a positive poem- I even thought you were having fun with me....

    but now I get it. Just for fun though try reading it in terms of lost love, as I did and tell me what you think...


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    December 22, 2005
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    Brava!! Well done!!

    An exquisite tribute beautifully crafted You have shown your compassion in beautiful imagery in giving tribute to your friend and embroidering with you poetic skill you have given tribute to yourself as well Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors Wishing you and yours a joyous Holiday Season


  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    thanks, luv, for the comment... care about her I do... though sometimes we take things for granted, and then they're gone...


  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    Thank you a million times, sweet silver sister, you can sense when something lays heavy on the heart...
    Edited on Dec 22, 1:26 p.m. because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    Thanks, Wanda... it is quite saddening that vini is leaving, but there is a hope of brightness there...


  • December 21, 2005
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    Beautiful tribute..

    This is a very serious poem from you my dearest brother tomerick....Although there is kind of hope that your dear friend Vini has, yet she is going to depart from AP. Sometimes I think it is necessary to hibernate and find peace... and then come back and be happy.. Hoping for her happiness...
    Well written and beautifully laid out with great flow.
    good work brother!


  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    Well, Elondar, I'll explain, for I sympathize with a tired mind! lol This dear, close poet friend of mine had been vexed by darkness in everything she tried, especially in the area of love, and was miserable. She turned to God and found light, and a great release, hence, the 'light not of the sun'...
    Edited on Dec 21, 11:41 p.m. because ''.


  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    that is an interesting cooincidence, Duana, because the subject poet above I believe did just the opposite, she went from flames of burning hell to a beautiful light!

  • grm
    December 21, 2005
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    Didn't know her, but obviously youdid and cared. Sorry for your loss.
    This could be set to music, I think. In a minor key.
    Like it's been said: poignant.

  • luvdrkchocolate
    December 21, 2005
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    Oh, this is so sad. Why is this person leaving? It seems like you still really care about her. You wrote a lovely poem, and I liked the style, it just really rolls along well. The repetition did it a lot of justice. Or, lestways, in my opinion it does. Maybe you'll be able to help her with this and change her mind! Thanks for the nice piece to read!


  • Night Hope gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    '...She had tried, sent out her love it just brought on her utter madness she now finds light not of the sun...' Sighhh... Lovely & poignant, Wayne...G'bye, Vini... Wanda


  • Anthony V Manuel
    December 21, 2005
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    Im embarrased to say that I don't get the complete meaning. However it flows well and is a very good write. Very deep. Perhaps too deep for tired people


  • duana
    December 21, 2005
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    This is absolutely gorgeous- and you really could not have found a more perfect background for this poem. Simply amazing.

    (interesting coincidence too- I just wrote a poem about once beautiful light turning into the flames of hell)(though not even close to as good as yours! I'm definitely not comparing the two).

    Keep writing! This is fantastic.

  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    thanks for the feedback, blue-eyed...

  • blueidblondie
    December 21, 2005
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    WOW! That was good. Great write.

  • wbiro gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    thanks, Dead...


  • Dead-December
    December 21, 2005
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    deep

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