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Completeness (A Challenge Submission)

This is what life came down to...

to one week left now I'm in the big apple walking through center city
city of 10 million plus people who feel for me, no pity
pity for my soul, which is about to cease, to no long exist
exist on a different plain, a level we can't reach like this

This is what love brings...

brings pain to you, a pain that you can't feel but just know is there
there to make you feel incomplete, to make you feel you're to compare
compare to the others, the people you see, as they walk on by
by and by and never saying anything, why? this

This is the most empty feeling...

feeling remorse on yourself for not telling Jen that you love her
her smile, her face, your high school sweet-heart, that I adored
adored and ignored, I feel so dumb, so left out now
now that I have no life left, but this final week, how? do I do this?

This is my final day on earth...

earth, such a beautiful name for this planet, created by such a wonderful god
god, the one who made all things, is all things, I apologize
aologize to you and my family for the man I was, that I've become, and realized
realized that without love, life is nothing... this

This is my last word to you...

you who loved me, who was always there for me, my loving lord
lord and savior, Christ, through you only shall I receive salvation
salvation to a new plain, the new level of fascination, of completeness
completeness in you, in life in love

Author notes

this is what I would feel, completeness, to complete my life, and to be completed only by looking to god, I'm spiritual huh?
Written January 18th, 2002

A contest entry

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  • Slekky
    January 29, 2002
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    Very spritual indeed! I really enjoyed the 'prayer like' ending, it's original and honest!