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Dogs in Snow (Cento Triolet)




Dashing through the snow,
Chasing after dogs,
Camera in tow --
Dashing through the snow!
What a crazy show
The two of us in fog
Dashing through the snow,
Chasing after dogs!




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This is a triolet, using a line from Jingle Bells.  Please be gentle; it's only my second one!  Thanks for the read.
Written December 21st, 2005

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  • Pookiebubu
    January 14, 2006
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    I do mean camera. Thank you for catching that, and, yes, that is my youngest up in the picture -- Szievesen, or Veshie as we call her. She's a Husky/Wolf hybrid and six months old.
    Thank you for your comments!


  • -LizBTropez-
    January 14, 2006
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    Is Camara a name or do you mean "camera" as in the photography equipment? Just asking. I think you did a great job on this- simple but pleasant read. Great visuals too- is that your dog? My husband had a husky/german shepherd mix when he was little, and I think I've seen a similar snapshot of him (his name was Rocky).


  • SusanL
    December 23, 2005
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    Again do not listen to Mr smarty pants - ask him where he learned how to write triolets!!! You caught on way easier than he ever did.
    I personally like the short lines, they add variety. yes, triolets usually do have longer lines, but there are no set meteric rules so tell Mr Captain of the greater squad (sounds sort of like a cheerleader that never grew up... ) to SIT ON IT!
    Susan


  • J Rhys Davies
    December 23, 2005
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    I think you did a wonderful job with this. The lines are a little short, but I still loved it. And no, I am not partial to you being one of my Greeters.

    OK, slip the 20 under the table while the others aren’t looking.

    Ahem………..excellent job my dear.

    ~ John


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    December 21, 2005
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    an original piece of art and love and fun showing through out this picture, love it.. thank you for sharing and making us smile..Linda


  • sunny day
    December 21, 2005
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    It's sooooo beautiful!!!!!

    Deborah, What a wonderful Triolet you have penned here and the subject matter is brilliant. I absolutely love it. The picture is gorgeous. Sitting here saying Awwwwwwww so cute.
    A lovely entry for the contest and you have all my best wishes.
    Thank you so much for sharing this. It's so adorable. I want to take the pup in my arms and cuddle it. Love and blessings for you my friend, today and always. A Very Merry Christmas and Happy New Year also for you and yours. Joyce

    P.S. Standing ovation to go along with my applause.


  • Ray Von
    December 21, 2005
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    I love it. It's very sweet and I love the little picture!!!! I've never written one of these before so I can't say anything bad Though there doesn't seemt o be anything wrong with it.
    MARIA


  • December 21, 2005
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    I really liked it. I also really liked your cute little dog. I never saw something like this and i love it. Keep up the good work and good luck in this contest.
    ~~lori~~

  • Ir.muse
    December 21, 2005
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    hmmm...a nice poem.A great job.
    Shahrzad

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