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Betrayal

I met you on the crossroads
Of a silent, whispering despair
Secrets exchanged were added to the many skeletons in the closet
Of all the lies, this one was most unfair

You touched the Ying that only my Yang knows
Guilty pleasures conflicted my mind
And my body betrayed me as my eyes closed
Only your love can save me this time

Why? Why must I continue to touch you
Why must I continue to want to feel you?
Why is the essence of what is his wanting to be yours?
I wonder if he's doing the same thing too

In the midst of my betrayal, he sees me
My skin has been touched, savored, wanted
The lust in his eyes that was only for me is fading
He notices the change in my Ying to his Yang
But he still loves me; even though my body was not his

You are my escape
My guilty love
My conflict in a life that is already predetermined
Forgive me father, for I have sinned
But I know, my body will betray me
And I'll come back to you again
"you are my sunshine, my only sunshine, you make me happy when skies are gray"

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option #1 october
Quote 4:
Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind.

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  • xochocoholicxo
    June 3
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    u didn't put CHOCOLATE IN AN
    but otherwise it was pretty godd
    thanx for entering good luck


  • Desdmona
    March 29
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    Is this a gold winning trophy? In the history of the poem's entries, there is no gold winning trophy. To be able to enter in this contest, your poem has to be a gold trophy winner. Please let me know because otherwise I will have to disqualify you (which I don't want to do because this is good).


  • Ephiphany
    July 14, 2008

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    Thank you for this entry

    however I stated in the RULES that I wanted Dark Backgrounds, because this is kinda hard to read. So, if you will, please resubmit this, I would really like to rejudge this. Thanks...e


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    hon i want you to know i do not mean any harm okay none but this font color is the most ridicolous choice for such a great poem are you serious these words are to great for this color take this under surgery immeiately

  • Virgoan
    April 15, 2008

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    the first and second stanza are very good. the 3rd and 4th didn't really work for me. though i must say the whole impact is good.

    thanks for sharing and keep writing.

    HENSLEY


  • Blooming Poet
    March 7, 2008
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    When some betrays you they just are not worth your time and are probaly scum.


  • brooklynngirl
    December 18, 2007
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    i liked how you used yin and yang.
    very clever.


  • forbidden-colour
    October 27, 2007

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    The last line added extra cuteness to the piece ^_^.
    Great
    Thank you for entering,
    Best of luck

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 27, 2007
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, Josephine


  • Lady Nightshade
    October 25, 2007
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    dark
    i like it
    the darkness of heartbreak is well known to me
    good luck in the contest


  • Celticmoon
    October 24, 2007
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    Thank you for taking the time enter and good luck to you!


  • Silenced Tears
    October 15, 2007
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    Wow it's so... wow...I loved how you used the ying and yang as a metaphor!


  • katie-jo
    October 13, 2007
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    This is a very original write, and incredibly unique. I particularly liked how you could incorporate "Ying and Yang" into your poem without distracting me from the rest of the piece.

    Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest.

    ~kate


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 13, 2007

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    This was a very interesting and unique write. I really enjoyed the elaborations and ideas in this. I like your use of the words "Ying and yang" Great comparisons. Best of luck to you in my contest, and thanks for entering


  • forever dreaming
    October 4, 2007

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    There is something almost haunting about this piece that really made it an interesting read. Good luck and many thanks for entering my contest.

  • sanura2008
    September 28, 2007

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    Afer the poem I wrote, this took me off guard, but it's a good poem. I liked how you used Yin and Yang, only thing I could say to it is maybe throw it in once more, make it more a part of the poem. Good job!


  • ItalianGurrl
    September 23, 2007
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    oh man what an amazingly awesomeacious poem. so emotional, truly it is.

    You touched the Ying that only my Yang knows

    that was my favorite line. it was so original!!! good luck in the contest!!!

    *Rachel*


  • Kati Kat
    September 21, 2007
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    aww i love this babe
    its really good

    ♥

  • ItalianGurrl
    September 20, 2007

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    please copy the option number into your author notes before i read this and notify me when you have done so. thanks

    ♥Rachel♥

  • californiagirl
    September 20, 2007
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    Good job. This was lovely. Thanks so much for your entry!


  • Genuine Solitaire
    June 20, 2007
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    please tell me which word you used


  • HannahBrookeXD
    February 20, 2006
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    The poem flows really well! I am also suprised at the number of comments! Anyway, Nice job! THank you for entering my contest!


  • MzDimeDivia
    December 26, 2005
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    Thanks for your suport.


  • tiffydawn08
    December 23, 2005
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    This is a great poem but only one other comment? usually on the poems that are as good as this one there are more comments. oh well i'm sure you'll get more. good luck in this contest.


  • Forgotten LiL Nikki
    December 23, 2005
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    great job

    Very nice,, I love the prayer in the end. Thank you for entering my contest. You write very lovely.

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