In the meadow, we can build a snowman;
Look at all the snow that's on the ground!
Because the white has covered all of the land,
In the meadow, we can build a snowman.
Instead of building castles in the sand,
Let's use this scarf and coal I found.
In the meadow, we can build a snowman;
Look at all the snow that's on the ground!
Author notes
This is my first Triolet, using the line from Winter Wonderland. Please be gentle! I love all songs about snow; so, I think I might try and write another entry. Thanks for reading!
Written December 21st, 2005
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Ignore the boss - he is all bark and no bite, unless you steal his Oreos!
he did get one thing right, this is a great triolet you have done a great job of making the refrain line work each time it occurs. Sometimes it just feels tagged on, but that is not the case here.
I am glad to see more people venturing into form poetry. I think knowing some of the rules helps even when writing free verse.
Thank you for this fune entry and good luck.
Susan -
By the way……………..
whoosh crack!
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Be gentle, my foot! No way in the world am I going to be gentle about your first triolet! Uh-uh. Nope. OK, so here it is with both barrels. Are you sitting down?
Brilliant! I loved this and then some. I hope that you decide to write more in this form, because you have done a marvelous job with it.
Was I too harsh on you? Sorry.
~ John
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I was there in my mind and it was cold. good poem
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