She would come from "Parts Unknown"
(Yes she would, my true love)
Secretive, Seductive, Stimulative.
We would write the words that others loved by,
leaving in our wake a world of romantic decadence.
Love, for us, would be magic,
consisting of words,
strung into sentences,
strung into poems,
forming loving volumes of mutual admiration.
True pleasure incarn(al)ate,
peers as lovers, imagined, then realized.
A dictionary would be our restaurant,
a thesaurus, our Disneyworld.
Writing words for others to love by.
Teachers both, yet students, one of the other.
My true love would not know my thoughts,
nor I hers,
and our fornication would lie in learning them.
In her words I would see the world
as only she could see it.
The words that others would love by.
and as all good things,
when it came time for an end,
we would go together, hand in hand,
into a new world.
And you can bet we will write all about that one, too.
Never dying, only passing from one world
to unravel the mysteries of the next,
leaving behind our immortality
in the guise of words
for others to love by.
Author notes
Choosing option six and writing about passion. As you can tell, it's not my best suit.
A contest entry
- Lotsa Options.. Come and see!!! by FightOffYourDemons.
550 points, ended December 8, 2008, 35 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
It's just a poem, please don't hold my pen hostage!
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lol, i like your critism comment, and I definitely will not be holding your pen hostage... or I will try not to, but if it helps me write better i just might, watch out
Anyway, your poem is fantastic, I like the "for others to love by " lines. That is a cute way of saying something. i would have except this in the passion or music topic because it sounded like you could have been writing songs too, you know what i mean.
Oh before I forget you need to make a little fix.
"when it came time for and end"
I think you meant an not and.
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can i bookmark this pls?just adored it too much.tnx
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Very beautifully written...such passion and emotion is evident in every word...great write!
--Animaechick
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This is lovely, not horrible at all! A unique look at romance and love, perhaps idealistic, but that's part of its charm. Don't belittle this piece, it's great.
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Horrible? Shit, I coulden't do anywere near that good!
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Horrible! You think that this is horrible??This is terrific~
Great Write!
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You have put into words something that I share with someone very special to me - just could never figure out how to express it. Very nice.
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Liked it alot
Bad? This is great! It's a fun read and it's a odd love poem..
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i really like it...its like what ihatepink23 said 'it's a unique spin on a love poem' kepp up the good writing!
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i agree with the other comments above... this write put a little unique spin on the regular "love poem". i definately enjoyed reading. itsa great deal far from horrible... have a little confidence, would ya?
- thanx for sharing
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You really out of the box in this poem. I really liked it. It wasn't a love poem really, but of a whole new catergory. I guess you could call it unique. Good Job!!
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this was good, and certainly not horrible! very interesting viewpoint and some lovely points put across- a good write, and I hope your 'slump' sits up straight soon. well done!
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it's sweet and beautiful.loved your words.perfect.made my day.
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I think that this is rather interesting. You have displayed romance in a way that I have not yet read before. This is far from horrible.. I really enjoyed reading it. Nice job.. I am glad that you placed this in the featured box.
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so maybe I had not read everything you had posted. I love this, can we do this?
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