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Alone


 

I long for a love to call my own,
the sweet spell of a enchanting tone
Words that melt my heart and set me ablaze,
and eyes that I could get lost in for days

 

I’d give her the world if by choice,
and my heart by just her sweet voice
Entangle me in truth and love,
oh, I pray to the maker above

 

Let me open my eyes wide,
and find love I have been denied
For so long since I yearned a kiss,
to send me sweet peaceful bliss

 

I know it is in front of my eyes,
this love I seek is in clever disguise
Why must it be hidden from me,
What did I do to deserve such misery

 

So here I wait under a dream boat sky,
as the ripples of love wade on by…

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Written December 20th, 2005

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  • oikevois baby silver member
    May 17

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    Let me open my eyes wide,
    and find love I have been denied

    creatively deep.

    Mylee

  • Shadow Darkstar silver member
    December 20, 2007
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    I too, am searching for love.
    Sucks, doesn't it?

  • Breaking The Girl
    November 22, 2007
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    Fantastic, and beautiful... My favorite, so far.


  • Cherry.Scented
    June 24, 2006
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    this poem was so beautiful, and stirred up such remarkably gorgeous imagery
    but it was so sad also, and brought a tear to my eye :'(

    i really loved this stanza:

    Let me open my eyes wide,
    and find love I have been denied
    For so long since I yearned a kiss,
    to send me sweet peaceful bliss

    it portrays such a sense of longing, and i truly hope you find what you're looking for

    but on the whole it was a great write

  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 24, 2006
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    This just flowed off
    the tongue. Beautifully
    written. So much emotion
    expressed. Great job.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Jeannie D Hunter

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    April 17, 2006
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    Oh this is wonderful. I love the imagery and the background picture. The flow of it is great, you have a wonderful talent. Thanks for sharing!
  • Rhygirl60 silver member
    April 17, 2006
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    A gentle poem of longing

    Sometimes loves creeps up on you when you least expect it.Whoever she may be she will have found a man with a silvern tongue.It is a pleasure to read a poem with sensitive touch that actualy pulls you into it to see what happens.I wish for you that part two-the- positive will soon need to be written .In the meantime enjoy the fact that longing and distress and frustration and sadness all can poduce the most wonderful poetry in the right hands Mr Right? I have used ups al my officia applayse but APPLAUSE from me of the home made kind..Please feel free to visit some of my earlier poetry , Rhygir58,Liverpool England

  • Anthony-
    April 17, 2006
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    Wow, what strong words. I understand them so well. The words that you have used really do reflect this mood of a strong sort of wanting. I cannot believe how much this has reflected me at times also. Well done and all the very best. You are a talented writer. Anthony aka Tony.

  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    April 17, 2006
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    oh, this was beauitful. just leaving me completley speechless. i love this poem. so deep, personal and emotional. Let me open my eyes wide,
    and find love I have been denied
    For so long since I yearned a kiss,
    to send me sweet peaceful bliss

    I know it is in front of my eyes,
    this love I seek is in clever disguise
    Why must it be hidden from me,
    What did I do to deserve such misery

    i love it!!
  • A Miserable Romance
    April 17, 2006
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    wow it is just the way I feel sometimes, but then I think I don't need anyone...really good poem, I can feel the loss of needing someone and not having them, good job!!

    I would applaud it but I am all out of applause, sorry.

  • Im3
    April 17, 2006
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    Awesome! Wonderful vision and the images you speak of are well described. You should be proud of this one.

  • Ink Shadow
    April 17, 2006
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    I long for a love to call my own,
    the sweet spell of a enchanting tone
    Words that melt my heart and set me ablaze,
    and eyes that I could get lost in for days<<If you replace "enchanting tone" and "sweet spell" with something more concrete and present, and revise accordingly other stanzas I think you have a fabulous poem sitting inside.

    D


  • A. L. Armocido - AM
    April 17, 2006
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    This is very well written. Wonderful job.
    I have a poem called Alone. I saw this and thought I'd check it out. Of course, it's very, very different from my version. lol. But nevertheless it is very lovely.
    Amanda

  • Sedasia
    December 31, 2005
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    Good work

    Celtic,

    What I love about your poetry is your choice of metaphor and the creative way you use words. Very nice work.

  • DecayedxBeauty
    December 26, 2005
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    Wow. Ryan really well done. I loved it. A lot of emotion and feelings but into this. I hope you find what you are looking for, but for now just be happy lol . Anyway great job and keep up the good work!
    <333Lexi<333
  • Kasumi Ukitake
    December 23, 2005
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    Wow, This Was Quite Lovely. It's Rare To Find A Poem That Rhymes And Is Good! Very Heartfelt, And One I Can Truly Relate To...Fabulous Write My Fine Friend!

    ~Element

  • Gwalinna
    December 22, 2005
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    Though you may feel alone you arent. just remember that my friend. i miss talking to you. Merry Christmas.

  • ChibberMonkey
    December 21, 2005
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    Remember Ryan...you arent alone. Im here

  • queen Greeters member
    December 20, 2005
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    I believe there is someone for everyone, i am sure they are looking for you right now too I wish every happiness for you

  • Ethereal One gold member
    December 20, 2005
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    very well written

    This is a very beautiful poem. You express your longing for a love. You use some powerful metaphors here and I love "eyes that I could get lost in for days." I enjoyed reading this one.
    etherealforu
  • DisgruntledBadger
    December 20, 2005
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    It gets a bit saccharine and cliche at times, but overall, it's a charming write.

  • AngelicMistress gold member
    December 20, 2005
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    GOOD JOB!!!!! :F

    True sometimes love is right there straing at you right in the face, you do not see it, however, i always say, what is meant to be is meant to be, many years could pass, and then.... Love Angel

  • Fain Extortion
    December 20, 2005
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    nice!

  • Shakes-spear
    December 20, 2005
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    It is true that sometimes true love is beside us all the time and we don't notice. Some only look for certain things thinking that is what their love will look like and miss their true love because their hair is a different color than we had dreamed it would be. Don't judge a dook by its cover... really you should not make a vision in your mind of the perfect partner, because the perfect partner may not look like what we thought! Nice write, The shaker

  • AllTheCyanideUdrank
    December 20, 2005
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    very good

    I realy enjoyed reading this, I thought it has very good emotion, or you had alot of emotion going on at the time you were writing this, I thought this poem was just great. I hope to see more of your work.

  • EatYourSunlight
    December 20, 2005
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    How sad, no one wants to be alone. Even though people do not realize it, but sometimes I have also afraid of being alone. Very nice poem.
    Love my darling and Merry Christmas
    angie

  • Heavenly Angel
    December 20, 2005
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    This is a piece written with a lot of heart and soul! I very much enjoyed reading this one, sweetie! It's gorgeous! Thank you for sharing!

  • Shadowed Stars
    December 20, 2005
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    Awesome poem. Nice symbolism. Love the dreamy, pondering nature of the lines.

  • Beautiful Dreamer
    December 20, 2005
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    beatiful write

    I long for a love to call my own,
    the sweet smell of an enchanting tone
    Words that melt my heart and set me ablaze,
    and eyes I could get lost in for days......

    Finding this love to call my own isn't going to be easy the way you've described him. lol Someday I hope to find someone just like this, for that, I don't mind waiting. Beautiful write. ;P
    Kelli
  • ntimeallrevealed
    December 20, 2005
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    ok...interesting poem...think we have all felt like this before...we sit and watch everyone else becoming happy and we become envious...but often instead of doing something about it we sit and ponder and dream aboutwhat could be and we let the very thing we are seeking pass us by...nice poem
  • Un4given2
    December 20, 2005
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    Interesting... more optomistic then my 'Alone' lol but I'm not good with 'hope' I hope I make it through another day... hmm... somewhat cliche by now but... anyway... don't mind me... um, I was gonna say more, oh well, maybe later
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