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Don't Look Away

You look over at me
And unlike all the others,
You don’t look away
Our eyes meet,
And for one brief and precious second
I see a possible future before me
Reality comes  and steals my hope
And I wish you could see it my way
It pains me so to know
What you don’t
The secret I hope you someday
Know is true
Because really all I want right now
Is you

Author notes

ummm yeah anywho this is about me and some other guy anyways yeah thats about all i will say right now.
Written December 20th, 2005

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  • VampyricNyteMare
    March 21, 2006
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    Excellent

    Lovin it babe! Lol hehe it is goodie though. I felt like this before. you captured the feeling greatly. Hey hey hey write more, I expect to see more writtings from you. Here I am typing away new lines a day and you havent given me something else to comment on. You arent loosing your touch are you? *gasp* I HOPE NOT!!! hehe no jk but seriously you gotta write more. I look forward to reading them and about this piece here...I especially like the lines:

    The secret I hope you someday
    Know is true
    Because really all I want right now
    Is you

    Beautiful.


  • yours to hold
    December 21, 2005
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    I love it! I feel that way too a lot! I know how you feel! Awesome poem!


  • Shannon62875
    December 20, 2005
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    aww i really like this write.. you sure as hell got your feelings out there and thats wha ti like... you did a really great job and i hope you get the one you want... good luck..! keep upt eh aweosme work